New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that many children have spent much of their spare time playing with the lastest technological devices. Despite some obvious advantages of this trend, I would argue that it is still outweighed by the possible drawbacks.
On the one hand, the development of new cutting-edge technology would partially bring several benefits. The first one is that children now have a variety of choices to enjoy their free time, compared to the past. To put it more simply, instead of updating information through radio or traditional newspapers, they can easily access to the Internet, then flicking through the breaking-news pn globe with just few clicks on their smart-phone or tablet. Another consideration is that the Internet gives youngsters countless opportunities to acquire more usefu knowledge apart from formal lessons at school, or even opens more avenue of making new friends with the same interests in any part of the world by using chat room and social network such as Facebook or Instagram. Consequently, new technology both promote the new habit of self-study and encourage young people to develop a wide circle of virtual friends
On the other hand, I believe that if children abuse state-of-the-art technology, it will bring serious drawbacks. Firstly, the availabilities of new communication technologies can have the result in isolating people and discouraging real interaction. For example, many young people choose to make friend online rather than going out with their peers in the real world, and it maybe the root of weak relationship in the furute. In addition, children now spend hours glueing their eyes on a computer screen, which turns them into "cough potato". In consequence, they will be prone to some serious diseases such as obesity or short-sight.
In conclusion, although the changing of technology is possibly beneficial for children, I believe that this prosensity is dominated by several disadvantages as mentioned above
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, may, so, still, then, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35048231511 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06979160803 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623794212219 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.122877705 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.666666667 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9166666667 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298964995164 0.244688304435 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986744375568 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720413520351 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170287926573 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364232747867 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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