In many countries schools have severe problems with students behavior.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
Bad students’ behaviour has been one of the most worrying concerns for school teachers throughout the world . Educationalists related this to numerous causes . And several approaches to Address this problem has been considered .
Examples of students’ poor behaviour are : other children bullying, less respect to the teachers and disobedience of school rules .
One of the most obvious causes of students’ misbehaviour is connected to student age or stage of growth . Two stages in child development have been founded to associate most with blizzard behaviour and resistance to change that it. These are post toddler stage (age of 5-7 years ), and adolescence stage (age from 12-18 years ). As these stages of growth found to be normally associated with changes in the levels of growth hormone and others hormones as well -like sex hormones -which hugely affect the child or adolescent behaviour, whether at the school or at home .many psychologists suggest that , children at these stages of development should be treated in special way and their teachers must attend special courses to provide them with the ideal means to the tackle problems associated with these steps of development.
Another important cause for pupils bad behaviour, seen especially in the developing countries, is family ignorance and deficient upbringing by the parents due large family size therefore fathers and mothers are too busy to track behaviour of every child in the family and to correct what is wrong . Indeed all the burden of behavioural child raising fall to school teachers , one suggested approach to raise this issue, is through family planning and educational campaign to parent to help them to acquire the necessary Knowledge and instructions for dealing with their children behavioural problems.
In conclusion , there are enormous factors responsible for students’ misbehaviour. However, the most important ones found to be related to their stage of development, and their families or communities . These can be solved through teachers training and awareness -raising for the parents.
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And several approaches to Address this problem has been considered .
And several approaches to Address this problem have been considered .
should be treated in special way
should be treated in a special way
ideal means to the tackle problems associated with these steps of development.
ideal means to tackle problems associated with these steps of development.
by the parents due large family size
by the parents due to large family sizes
However, the most important ones found to be related to their stage of development, and their families or communities .
However, the most important ones are found to be related to their stage of development, and their families or communities .
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flaws:
1. Need better essay format.
Leave a blank line between paragraphs.
Don't put a space before punctuation marks.
2. No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2 //Double check grammar issues after essay writing.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 322 350
No. of Characters: 1706 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.236 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.298 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.758 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.211 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.308 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.321 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
This E-rater evaluation only
This E-rater evaluation only .you told that there will be human grader evaluation as well .there isn't any comments about task achievement or structure, which i think is very important. I found that E-rater comment is merely summary for the free egrader report .
There are no issues for task
There are no issues for task achievement or structure for this essay, that's reason we (human graders) didn't put them.
and we don't list all flaws in the first essay, we only list flaws which are serious, once you removed those serious flaws in the following essays, we will focus on other issues which are not serious but by removing those issues, it can help for higher marks.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, therefore, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49378881988 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01485739542 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552795031056 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 123.260296088 49.4020404114 250% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 136.076923077 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152575370939 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602921223674 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0373323036121 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850840815726 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400082218867 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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