TPO-12 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by rama_r on Sun, 09/10/2017 - 17:58

A prosperous future life and career is what every student dreams of. Contemplating about different paths of reaching their dream job some students might choose to specialize in one major in a goal of achieving a profound knowledge, however, another group of students might select to have a broader knowledge on different subjects. As far as I am concerned, I would prefer the second path. Many substantiated reasons go as follows.

To begin with, having a broad knowledge gives students a chance to find their real interest major area to choose as their future career. By taking one or two class in every subject, students can analyze which major attracts them the best. There are many people, who thought they would know what they like as their future job, regretted the path that they have chosen once it was too late for them and after they
have spent a tremendous amount of money and time.

Another significant aspect that should be taken into consideration is that with a broader spectrum of knowledge, people have rather profound understanding about their environment and society that they are living in. For instance, a medical student should know how to work with the new technologies and some simple applications like Microsoft Word and Spread Sheets for writing research or just analyzing
some simple data. Furthermore, almost everybody should have a simple knowledge about economics or accountings, as well as sociology, politics and history to be fitted in this rapidly changing world. To illustrate it, every individual should have an economic plan and know how to invest their earnings for a brighter future. Consequently, his economics knowledge comes into play. Moreover, every citizen should be aware of the political aspects and situations of their country to take steps and actions for the prosperity of their country, and so forth.

As a final point, I firmly believe that students who choose to broaden their knowledge will have a stronger self-confidence. Owing to the fact that they find themselves knowledgeable in various areas. They can interact with different people and have a rather extended network, as opposed to always interact with same people and talking about the same things. Furthermore, this monotonous life-style can lead to depression and boredom.

all in all, taking all the aforementioned reasons into account, I suggest that a broad knowledge of many subjects is advantageous for people. They have a higher chance for finding their dream job and better understanding of the world that they live in.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, as to, for instance, talking about, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1686746988 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.799504342 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532530120482 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6061868032 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.894736842 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12574680772 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421657162519 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321143017147 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0669812408496 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286256079639 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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