The argument here concludes that there is some relation of birth order with the level's of stimulation of an individual. The argument here provides study of rhesus monkey's as the baseline for this conclusion and also mentions about the humans showing same results. The argument is full of gaps and loop holes since it presents fragmentarly evidence.Neither are the premises convising nor is the conclusion compelling. The argument is very evidently the result of a hasty generalization.
Firstly, the argument here mentions about a study on eighteen rhesus monkeys and concludes that first born monkeys produce twice as much as cortisol compared to its younger siblings. But the author here doen't mentions about what the gender and the age of monkeys. The main point here is the secretion of an hormone, and the secretion of an hormone can vary with the gender and also the age of monkeys. The author here needs to specify the gender and age of the monkeys on which the study was based on.
Secondly, the argument here mentions about the humans. That the firstborn human produces relatively higher levels of cortisol. The word relatively in the sentence needs to clartified. It can be the case that this relative high hormone can be due to gender or age difference of this hormonal difference can be actually neglible to be counted.
Thirdly, the argument mentions about the first time mother monkeys and those who have given several offspring. But the argument here doesn't site the information about mother. It can be the case that older mother doen't care about their food or nutrition, as they cared during their first child.
The argument is the result of huge speculation in which the author has comfortably assumed a considerable amount of data. Had the author taken the above discussed factors into view, it would have rendered the argument irrefutable. But whatever is presented fails to provide a holistic picture to the superfluous claims being made.
- Theories about risk-taking personality 73
- It is better to marry someone who is similar to you, rather than someone who is different from you. 83
- Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. chose another technological that you think that is important. Give specific reasons for your choic 83
- Summarize the points with the core curricula discussed in the lecture, and then explain the advantages to fixing these problems using points from the reading. 78
- Tidal Power 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... about the humans showing same results. The argument is full of gaps and loop holes...
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Line 1, column 349, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Neither
...since it presents fragmentarly evidence.Neither are the premises convising nor is the c...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...The main point here is the secretion of an hormone, and the secretion of an hormon...
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Line 3, column 338, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ion of an hormone, and the secretion of an hormone can vary with the gender and al...
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Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...everal offspring. But the argument here doesnt site the information about mother. It c...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1645.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04601226994 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68202202159 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493865030675 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.385496025 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3888888889 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27777777778 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175255164066 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563481201025 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767338312518 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0938683622733 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0892726732889 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.