Firstly, the lecturer feels that the use of the electronic medium to keep data will not save money. She avers that those doctors who adapt to use of using technology to save their work data, they also keep original paper-based data so that they can use that in any emergency or police case. As they will continue to use the paper-based record, they will be unable to save money by using technology.
Secondly, the writer of the reading states that medical errors will be reduced by using electronic medical records, however, the speaker does not agree with this assumption. She said that as the row data are mainly generated by the doctor who will not involve at recording or be storing the data in an electronic format, the bad handwriting problem will not remove from the data. As a result, people cannot hope that medical errors will be eliminated by using technology.
Finally, the writer of the reading claims that if all medical data can store in an electronic medium, the researcher will be benefited. On the other hand, the professor feels that this will not help to research more accurately. He says that all data are private and every patient has the key to controlling his or her medical data, and he can block to other people except curing cases. And there are several legal restrictions to use or access that information, so one has to pass many people and agency to get access the data to do research which is almost impossible to do.
That's how the speaker refutes the argument of the reading.
Everyone has his own medium to be motivated. It is obvious that advice coming from an eminent person has a strong influence on the adult population of a country. However, all saying are not take as seriously as some others. In my opinion, celebrities advice has more impact on adult people than an older people. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the large portion of people of a country who are young is more prone to imitate other especially celebrities. For example, when I was at college, one of my favorite actors was Amir Khan who was the main character of my favorite movie 3 Idiots, I always tried to copy his role in my day to day life. As a result, I was beginning to consider myself as an engineering student like he was in that movie. Finally, when I admitted to an engineering university, I found myself very satisfied. So, this example properly illustrates how a role of an actor can influence a college student.
Secondly, student life is the best time to learn something new and after being an elderly people no one wants to learn or know something new. When we are at an initial stage, we have lots of time to watch other activities especially someone who is very popular with all people. On the other hand, when we go to a process of learning and finish the level, we do not want to back ourselves to the previous stage. As a result, we do not like to learn from others rather we just want to establish our own opinion. For instance, Shakib Al Hassan, the allrounder cricketer of the ICC, is followed by many young people, once he gave a message about sanitation problem of our villages as well as a city. Even though his message is not unknown to people, all students started work with his organization and then save lots of people's life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
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Suggestion:
...ring student like he was in that movie. Finally, when I admitted to an engineeri...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, as to, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 599.0 407.700716846 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59098497496 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94716853372 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51087583905 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474123539232 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 900.9 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8625174717 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.851851852 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1851851852 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07407407407 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0863845720914 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0251886763618 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276925290501 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0393989169142 0.150856017488 26% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234432264534 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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