TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by wsxedc on Sun, 09/24/2017 - 08:52

Obviously, friendship is an important and inevitable part of our life which should be cherished in every way possible. People tend to make friend and share their thoughts. They spend a considerable amount of their time with them every day. Some people would agree with the idea that keeping their old friends is more important than making new friends; others would disagree. Although, advent of new modern technology makes it easy to keep our old friendship, I prefer to make new connection than to keep our old friends for two important reasons.
First, some radical changes in every phase of our life make people to select new friendship. As people get older and older, It is more probable that their interests, thoughts changes. These changes would need some new friends whose thoughts and interests are the same as your current situations. For example, when I was high school, which was located in my hometown, I had some close friends. We spend most of our times on our commons like as hanging out with each other, going to cinema, playing football and so on. It was worthwhile to cherish our friendship. Nevertheless, after we had finished high school, some of them found a job and started working and therefore started their family, the other migrated to another city where was far away, and bout me, I decided to continue my studying. I accepted at a university in another city. These days I am studying my interest major with some new friends. As you can see, although we liked to keep on our friendship, the world wants something different.
Second, it helps to be more successful in your life. For example, when I was in university, I had two friends who were completely different. One of them just have two friends all the time he was at the university, but the other one make new friends with everyone easily. Although they live at the same place and the same major as well, the latter one was always more successful because he had many new friends. Whenever he had any problem in his project or homework, he just share the problem with all of his friends, it was interest that one of his friends could help him with his problem. As you can see, if he had not made so many friends, he would not have solved his problem so rapidly.
To sum up, although most of people prefer to keep their old friends I definitely prefer to make new friendship. Not only do we have to make new friends, but we also would be more successful. Everyone have to make new friends as they change their conditions such as schools, cities.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 976, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'wants'' or 'want's'?
Suggestion: wants'; want's
...ed to keep on our friendship, the world wants something different. Second, it helps ...
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Line 4, column 21, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...roblem so rapidly. To sum up, although most of people prefer to keep their old friends I defi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63474387528 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49348136512 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467706013363 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3242471892 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7083333333 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7083333333 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29166666667 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228813929736 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726995687129 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662186470591 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161637017778 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620354043534 0.0645574589148 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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