Obviously, we live in a modern century. Thechnology are advancing every day. it is sure that advancing is completely required for our lifes. Some people beleive that in twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today; however, others disagree. Altought it seems many people defend the idea that the number of cars would increase every day, I definitely believe that the number of cars would decrease considerably for two important reasons.
The first reason is that it is the best way to overcome air polution problem. As everyone should know from the media, the most debatable problem in these days is air polution. Based on recent research, it is said that one of factor that contrinutes to this problem is our cars. For example, in my city, which is a tourist city, many people travel to my city from all over the world every day because of its temper weather and landscapes. A majority of proportion of these people prefer car to have a tour of my city. On the other hand, the city is not as big as to enfure these innundation of cars and tourists. Therefore, the city is sautrated in the big problem. The council should do something to improve the conditions, for example they can supersede cars into something else. Based on an article that I have read recently, It is said that the world has a condition as the same as the city which is mentioned here. As you can see, governments need to did something about the problem.
Second, it is not an safe vehicle. Based on some new research, there are so many casualties every day in fatal car crashs in the world. To avoid being include in these kind of calamities, people would prefer to travel and commute through air transformation system. For instance, based on a recent poll, majority of people prefer to travel by airplane not only in near distances but also in remote distances. As another example, people opt to travel by train because it is safer and more compfrotable than cars too. As you can see, it is predictable that in the far future these kind of transportaion would be used more than today.
To sum up, Although some people disagree with the idea that in twenty years ther will be fewer cars in use than there are today, I completely agree with the idea. Not only does it overcome the air polution but it is more convinence. Government should did something to faster this process.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...y. Thechnology are advancing every day. it is sure that advancing is completely re...
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Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...g about the problem. Second, it is not an safe vehicle. Based on some new researc...
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Line 3, column 162, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...in the world. To avoid being include in these kind of calamities, people would prefer to t...
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Line 3, column 573, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...t is predictable that in the far future these kind of transportaion would be used more tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60756501182 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52554863348 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477541371158 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7970460147 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.2083333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177024222561 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462026296102 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850832216917 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132150276179 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729840466982 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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