An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The following argument claims that, in order to eradicate the vitamin A deficiency among the people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, the government organization of Tagus has developed a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. Thus, by farming of this new breed of millet, the problem of vitamin A deficiency will be eroded. This argument initially seems legitimate but when scrutinized thoroughly has numerous loopholes which weakens the argument and eventually relegates the decision of the Tagus government.
To begin with, the argument fails to provide evidence about the weather conditions of Tagus. Are the weather and soil conditions favorable for the growth of the new breed? if not, the new breed of millets although rich in vitamin A will not grow due to unfavorable climatic conditions. Eventually causing debts to the government.
Secondly, although the government is ready to pay subsidies for farming of the new variety of millets as the seeds of the new type of millets cost more, the argument fails to put light on the opinion of the farmers, if they are ready to cultivate the new seeds or not. IF farming of the new breed of millets is a cumbersome task, the farmers would deny the government's proposal. This point weakens the arguement.
Thirdly, the argument directly assumes that millet being the staple food of people in Tagus, the people will readily accept the change. The consent of people here is neglected. If the people disagree upon buying the new variety of millet after it has been cultivated, the goverment and farmers will face a tremendous monetary loss. Also, there has been no evidence provided about the consumption of such hybrid millets the issue of vitamin deficiency has been resolved or not. With this point, the argument is weakened.
To wrap up, the goverment's decision of of replacing the ordinary millet with the hybrid millet as the staple food for the people of Tagus fails to justify its importance as a vital decision. Thus the argument miserably fails in justifying its point. Instead of cultivating new breed of millet, the government should undertake health awareness programmes where the repercussions of poor health and vitamin deficiency should be explained. Regular medical checkups will also solve this problem.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: This point weakens the arguement.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: If the people disagree upon buying the new variety of millet after it has been cultivated, the goverment and farmers will face a tremendous monetary loss.
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. //maybe the cost is more than the subsidies
condition 2:
Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. //maybe the taste is not good enough to locals
conclusion:
To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet. //maybe there are something more important
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: ? Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 374 350
No. of Characters: 1861 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.398 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.976 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.682 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.848 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in the impoverished nation of Tagus, the government organization of Tagus has dev...
^^
Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...orable for the growth of the new breed? if not, the new breed of millets although ...
^^
Line 6, column 358, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...ersome task, the farmers would deny the governments proposal. This point weakens the arguem...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 37, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...d. To wrap up, the goverments decision of of replacing the ordinary millet with the ...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 191, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ify its importance as a vital decision. Thus the argument miserably fails in justify...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1910.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 374.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10695187166 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72464484908 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475935828877 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 67.5139874704 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.526315789 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6842105263 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.535779871484 0.218282227539 245% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152113626065 0.0743258471296 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.189588780011 0.0701772020484 270% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307846430387 0.128457276422 240% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.222506629112 0.0628817314937 354% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.