Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of the time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing thing together that are related to the school work.
Some people think that it is better for parents to spent their free time helping their children in school work. People think that one of the parents responsibilities is to help their children to study more. Although I understand their point of view I have a different opinion. I believe that it is best for parents and children to have fun time together. The basics of my opinion is social and educational.
From the social perspective, parent and children need to understand each other better. If parent will spend more time with their children playing sport or even having fun time, that would create a better relationships between them. For example, some parents prefer to participate for their children in a sport to encourage them. They go with them to the training. They encourage them. They stand beside them until they successes and become expertise. That’s how parents could create a friendship relation between their children. Although some parents are too busy with their work, they believe that encourage their children is the best way for having a better social life.
Educationally, the school responsibilities is to teach children and lean them the better methods for studying. If parent incorporate their selves in children education, that would endanger the children not benefit them. For example, parents are not expertise in teaching and leaning. Schools have many teachers and they are better trained to educate the children. They know how to deliver the information to the children easily. The understand the psychosocially for each child. And they know that each child need a different way of education. On the other hand, parents want their children to succeed. They try to force their children to understand the subject, even if that is hard for them. That may create problems and eventually children may hat the education.
In conclusion for the reasons I mentioned above , I believe that busy parents should better enjoy their free time with their children. They could share interest with each other. They could encourage them to be more proficient. That create a better relationships between them. Also, parent should not involve in their children education. Schools are the best to teach them. School system are created to learn children in a proper ways.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s to help their children to study more. Although I understand their point of view I have...
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... children to have fun time together. The basics of my opinion is social and educa...
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...my opinion is social and educational. From the social perspective, parent and ...
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...m to the training. They encourage them. They stand beside them until they successes ...
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...til they successes and become expertise. That's how parents could create a ...
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...esses and become expertise. That's how parents could create a friendship re...
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... way for having a better social life. Educationally, the school responsibiliti...
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...the information to the children easily. The understand the psychosocially for each child. And ...
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...problems and eventually children may hat the education. In conclusion f...
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...ually children may hat the education. In conclusion for the reasons I mentione...
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...lusion for the reasons I mentioned above , I believe that busy parents should bett...
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...e created to learn children in a proper ways.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.109375 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71345168321 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.401041666667 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 559.8 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8880211136 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.6551724138 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.2413793103 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.20689655172 5.45110844103 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278966496963 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912882733549 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103619779788 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220066764906 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812592922724 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.47 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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