Nowadays, parents don't have the time to play with their children anymore. What activity should they ask the children to do during the period: have fun playing games/sports, or spend time with schoolwork?

Submitted by pier123 on Sat, 10/14/2017 - 09:10

Today's life makes both parents work, and this prevents them having a lot of time to spend with their children. Although some people think that parents should use this limited time in child's schoolwork, I believe they should use this time to have fun with their children. Playing strengthens parents and child relationship and helps both of them. Moreover, if their child needs help with schoolwork, parents have the option to employ a tutor.

Playing or having fun activities plays a positive role in child and parents relation. Without it, children might feel lonely and unhappy. So the parents should use their limited time with the utmost consideration that benefits their child. Being unhappy or feeling lonely can affect child's performance in school. For example, if a child feels lonely, he or she might not listen to the teacher lecture in class which finally results in low grades.

Similarly, parents are also benefited from playing. After hours of working in office or company, it is reasonable that the children find them reluctant to help with the schoolwork. Playing and having, however, is quite tempting for any person which convince parents to engage in it to be happier and more energetic.

On the other hand, if the parents feel that their child needs help with the schoolwork, they should consider employing a tutor for their child because they can not offer their child a professional help and it may exacerbate the problem. A child needs a sustainable help to improve in his or her schoolwork. Consider a situation where a child is weak in his mathematics and parents decide to spend their limited time to help him, first they should take some time to remember course material and then they start helping him.

In sum, using limited time playing sport is a more profitable option for both children and their parents as I stated in preceding lines. Nonetheless, parents are not trained to help their children in schoolwork, so they should turn this responsibility to an experienced tutor.

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Average: 6.3 (1 vote)
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Independent TOEFL Writing

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, similarly, so, then, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1684.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99703264095 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58053799812 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489614243323 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 486.9 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7258729531 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0588235294 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371264992709 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139986043718 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992349186267 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236035867189 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927671172955 0.0645574589148 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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