Successful people try new things and take risk rather than doing what they know how to do well
Some people think that doing the same thing day after day is better. People believe that doing the ordinary work is the best way for success. Although, I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that trying new thing or taking risk is the best method to be a successful person. The basis of may opinion is educational and social.
From a social perspective trying new thing is the better way to broaden my horizon . By working in different jobs . For example, for me as I am working in a pharmacy. Working on different work station help me to learn more. I was only working on filling prescriptions. Then I realized that I am very slow at typing computer. So I talked to my manager and asked him that I need to start typing. At that point I get my more experience at typing and filling. Trying new things is the best way to learn more.
Financially, taking risk will help you to understand the value of money. Some people think that taking risk will promote them to waste money. I agree with them, some time trying new things lead us to waste some money, but eventually we learn and we will never do it again. For instance, last month I was surfing the internet to buy some clothes. I found a very cheap website. I bought some clothes from that website. Unfortunately I put my credit number and they stole me. From that moment I learned that taking risk is the best way to learn new thing.
In conclusion for the reason I mentioned above, I believe that the best way to improve some thing. Or to success in you life is to spend time. Taking risk is work it. Some time it seems that taking risks is dangerous, however the opposite is true.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41925465839 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43631543659 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490683229814 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 419.4 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7753164052 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 59.2916666667 100.406767564 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.4166666667 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04166666667 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254190090957 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711125045051 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712205096405 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169598918112 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795376348029 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.1 11.7677419355 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 58.1214874552 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 10.1575268817 47% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.76 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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