For any child, parents are the entity that are most concerned about their child's future, success and well-being. They look after their children to see them as being the best in the world. In order to achieve this, different parents groom their children differently. Some parents motivate their children by providing more leisure time on each goal achieved. Such as allowing them to go for sports or letting them watch cartoons. While other parents give incentives to children in terms of monetary rewards. I think this way of incentivizing is great because of several reasons. A couple of which are expalined below.
Firstly, giving money to children on getting good grades in exams teaches children a reality of life, that is, "There is no free meal". This fact would soon become a part of the personality of the children which could be great for their professional careers. Basically, by learning this fact, children can learn the importance of both the hard work and money. Moreover, they would also be able to relate each other. This way they already know that they really need to burn midnight oil and go through tough times before they are rewarded. This is a great lesson to be learned in childhood. I remember that when I was in the school I would really put in my best to get some money to buy my favorite chocolates. And now when I am a graduate, I already know what's the way to get my favorite sports car. It's hardwork, life has no shortcuts, simple.
Secondly, incentivizing the grades can be a brilliant solution for parents to motivate their children to study. As we all understand, school-age children don't really enjoy studying. They like to spend most of their times relaxing and having fun. So, it is quite a tough ask for parents to motivate their children. Most of the parents get fed-off giving them inspirational lectures. And at times, they start scolding their children out of frustration when nothing is not working. This could be an awful situation to be in. While on the other hand, a good way to go about it is to monetize the method of inspiration. Because that's easy for parents and saves time their time. With only a $1 note you can arouse more inspiration in a 10 year old than in an hour of boring lecture that children can hardly fathom. Now when I am an adult, I see a lot of my relatives employing this technique. And it really works. Their children are always ready to put in the extra hours in studies so that they can get some financial rewards from parents. While their parents can do more important tasks.
Therefore, in my opinion, it is highly feasible to incentivize the education of school children because this has long-term learning for children as well as is more convinient for parents.
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- TPO-01 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, employees typically work five days a week for eight hours each day. However, many employees want to work a four-day week and are willing to accept less pay inorder to do so. A mandatory policy requiri 81
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- TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 83
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i think, such as, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2342.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87916666667 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60334987191 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502083333333 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.003024504 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1875 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 38.0 4.53405017921 838% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290270446933 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731504764325 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443217390231 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069608154688 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492140971825 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.43 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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