28/10/2017
Animals are used by humans for profit in many ways. However, some people don’t agree with this use of animals. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Since the stone age, humankind has been using animals for profit in a wide variety of ways. However, some aver those practices should be stopped. Below both prospects will be discussed and author’s opinion will be given.
On the one hand, exploitation of animals is a necessity. Firstly, many traditions, customs and rituals are rooted in human interaction with animals because for hundreds and even thousands of years, livestock has been providing mankind with food, clothes and workforce. Keeping exploiting the living creatures means to be in touch with our history and cultural heritage. Secondly, animals are an indispensable source of food. If today there left on pigs, no cows and horses, a half of the humanity would die from starvation and food shortage within a month. Moreover, economies of many states badly depend on the revenue got from sales of meat, animal skin and dairy products. Taking away this resource of income will inevitably devastate the citizens of those countries. In other words, using animals for profit is needed for keeping traditions alive and fueling the economy.
On the other hand, many individuals are against the usage of living creatures. Perhaps, the most widespread argument is the immorality of mankind’s actions. In fact, bringing up animals and then killing them ruthlessly is rather a barbaric practice, in particular, from a point of view of city dwellers who do not get used to such cruelties. Furthermore, the advancement of modern technologies will provide human beings with a possibility to grow artificial meat, skin and other products on a big scale. In fact, such technologies have been available for a couple of years by now.Thus, the victimization of animals may be stopped without creating a food deficit.
In my opinion, although our past is bond with killing and using living creatures, we ought not to try to stop the progress. Disawoving the past habits and customs that have become obsolete and embracing the new ones that will not involve using animals from making money is a right action to do.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. the topic is: 'Animals are used by humans for profit in many ways', it is not closely related to traditions, customs and rituals. we may give other reasons like:
we still have to use animals for medical test. if not, people will suffer.
2. try to avoid using same structure, like:
has been using
has been providing
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1673 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.921 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.627 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.915 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.276 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.466 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.04 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'creatures'' or 'creature's'?
Suggestion: creatures'; creature's
...orkforce. Keeping exploiting the living creatures means to be in touch with our history a...
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Line 5, column 586, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
... available for a couple of years by now.Thus, the victimization of animals may be st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, in fact, in particular, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13274336283 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78965915583 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607669616519 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6006890245 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8333333333 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.38888888889 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202274544039 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574606961769 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045442385195 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127255621127 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427549089966 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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