Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and risks rather than doing what they already know how to do well.
use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In this age that we are living in, most people go about their life and they do not try anything new. They go to school, learn what every body else is leaning and after school, when they want to enter the workforce, they are a part of a massive crowd that have the same skills. Therefore the employers do not have to give the average person a high sallary, because he or she is replacable. I believe to be successful, you have to be needed in your business. I think this will only come true if person takes risks and do what he or she believes is right. If a person believes in taking risks, he will do things that he believes are right, against everyone telling him not to. And it really increases ones level of confidence, when something that everyone is telling you not to do is turning out to be the best move in the situation and that you were right all along. There are a lot of people that want to be unique and risk takers, but most of them can't do it properly. Because risk taking is not just jumping into any situation that other people tell you no to with your eyes closed. Sometimes it is better to listen to other peoples advice. It is hard to find the edge between being an advice taker and working solo.
I think to be successful, you have to be openminded enough to listen to other people, not like some arrogant bussinesmen who think they know everything about everything. But you also have to have an independent mind, independent from other people's words so they can not sway you in one direction.
There is an aspect of being successful, beside being reach or famous that I believe I need to address here. A risk taker, will do what he believes is right, not what he is told to do. This will creat an ultimate sense of responsibility that other people do not have. For the same reason, I believe that young adults who rely on their own thinking and accept the conciquences of their actions are much more responsible poeple. Poeple that just try to do what thaey have been thought, will usually end up as someones employee, which they need to be told what to do. These cathegory of people will not feel as satisfied with their life, because they are not involved in the decision making process.
For exmaple, I want to mentions Steve Jobs. He went to Stanford University but dropped out and later he started the company Apple that changed everyones life. Apple, as you probably know, revolutionazied the phone industry. Steve Jobs was a risk taker for sure. He dropped out from one of the best universities in the world, because he did not see his work in stanford meaningful. There were probably a lot of people who told him this is crazy thing to do, nut he did it anyway. I believe to be succesful, you have to be independent minded like him.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...assive crowd that have the same skills. Therefore the employers do not have to give the a...
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Line 1, column 699, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ing him not to. And it really increases ones level of confidence, when something tha...
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Line 1, column 949, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...nique and risk takers, but most of them cant do it properly. Because risk taking is ...
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Line 1, column 970, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
..., but most of them cant do it properly. Because risk taking is not just jumping into an...
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Line 1, column 1056, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...ny situation that other people tell you no to with your eyes closed. Sometimes it ...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...ing process. For exmaple, I want to mentions Steve Jobs. He went to Stanford Univers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, if, really, so, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.416015625 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41822983622 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474609375 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9329000982 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9615384615 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.03846153846 5.45110844103 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246330004422 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761372150179 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618897585057 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154196919049 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741405038788 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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