Lifestyle has undergone dramatic changes over a couple of decades. Presently, majority of people have materialistic attitudes and they tend to buy things unnecessarily without considering their needs and requirements. Here, i would like to account for reasons and mention this trend has negative outcomes for the society.
There are manifold reasons behind this happening. First and foremost, advertisements play a phenomenal role to encourage people towards unnecessary shopping. To demonstrate, nowadays people watch variety of adverts that are endorsed by their favourite celebrities. As a result, they get influenced to buy things whether they need or not. What is more, marketing strategies of companies also tempt people towards shopping for latest consumer durables. To be specific, exciting offers such as buy one get one free, gorgeous packaging, free gifts and special offers given by enterprises allure people towards buying things. Hence, people are psyched up by adverts to do shopping for trivial things.
There are manifold drawbacks of this trend. First and foremost, excessive consumerism is leading to the problem of rubbish these days. To justify, most of household things are replaced frequently by the new stuff. more and more use of goods is leading to rise in the production of waste material. A massive number of things are discarded and thrown to landfill sites. Thus, the problem of rubbish is on the elevation and it has become a worrying concern for ecology. Furthermore, people are becoming spendthrift as they believe in buying things which they may not need in daily life.
Further emphasizing on my point of view, The trend of buying more and more is leading to hike in the price of goods. To justify, the demand of different consumer durables is exceeding to supply and therefore manufactures are hiking the prices of products. Hence, it is upsurging burden on the pockets of customers. What is more, many things that are made by non biodegradable material can not be recycled easily. Thus, it can cause environmental issues.
To recapitulate, shopping has become part and parcel of our lives. Undeniably, buying things in excess has few merits. However, the negative results of this trend outweigh positives.
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Essay evaluation report
i would like to account for reasons and mention this trend has negative outcomes for the society.
i would like to account for reasons, and mention that this trend has negative outcomes for the society.
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flaws:
1. reasons in the second paragraph are similar
2.'Why is it happening, in your opinion? ' is the main question, which need two paragraphs to demonstrate the reasons (though one paragraph is enough), while 'Is it a positive or negative trend for the individual and the society?' need only one paragraph since it is the second question which is not important as the first question.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1834 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.123 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.764 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 14.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.055 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.257 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.03 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing their needs and requirements. Here, i would like to account for reasons and m...
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Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...backs of this trend. First and foremost, excessive consumerism is leading to the ...
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Line 6, column 151, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: More
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...ch they may not need in daily life. Further emphasizing on my point of view, The t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, such as, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3156424581 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8627196874 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564245810056 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7569473547 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.12 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.32 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.24 7.06120827912 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.4128256513 322% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240306024332 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581962990732 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055707573661 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974181641559 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648859946925 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.98 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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