Both the reading passage and the lecture discuss the possibility of sending human to Mars. Albeit the article provides three challenges to claim that sending human to Mars is not practical, the lecturer mentions some discoveries of recent studies solving these challenges.
First of all, travelling to Mars takes a very long time, about two years. According to the author, providing food, water and oxygen for astronauts for this long period seems impossible. However, the lecturer points to hydroponics which are plants growing in water instead of soil. These plants require small spaces and can supply food. Also, they can recycle water vapor and reproduce water to drink in addition to modifying CO2 into fresh air to breath.
Secondly, the author points to the zero gravity in Mars decreasing muscle mass and lowering bone density. Still, the author misses the point that there are a lot of space stations in the space, and astronauts have to spend months there. As the lecturer asserts, there are some techniques to prevent from the adverse impacts on human body, such as regular exercise, so that muscle mass would not decrease, or taking calcium tablet to prevent bone density from lowering.
Finally, the author claims there are some space radiation dangerous for human body, and if we want to prevent from these radiations, we must build a shield to protect the space ship. But this shield would make the ship too heavy, as it adds weight. On the basis of what the lecturer says, sun produces these dangerous radiations occasionally when is active and not all the time. As a solution, we can build a small light shield which not only protects astronauts in active phase but also does not add too much weight.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 12.0772626932 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1433.0 1373.03311258 104% => OK
No of words: 290.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94137931034 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39024225261 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58275862069 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.686101599 49.2860985944 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.357142857 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.7273730684 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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