TPO 1: At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and library and should receive equal financial support.
There is no doubt that nowadays physical as well as social activities is an inevitable part of humankind’s life. This brings up a highly controversial topic: Should university administrations devout the same amount of money for social and sports activities as they do for academic contexts? I agree with the idea that universities should make an equal investment in sports and social activities as they do for the university classes. The reasons behind this viewpoint concern students’ future job and health. I will discuss them in the following paragraphs.
The first reason that immediately comes to mind is that social activities increase the possibility of getting a job in the future. In fact, nowadays a lot of companies ask their job candidates to have a high level of communication skill in order to recruit them. If the students practice communicating with people effectively, it is likely that they will be employed in the future. For example, I recently applied for one of a job vacancy in a famous company. Manager of the company required from its job applicants to demonstrate communication ability. For this purpose, the manager decided to test my communication proficiency by setting an experiment. In this experiment, I had to interact with customers in order to show whether I was suitable for the job position of public relation or not. I had attended at various social activities such as students club during my study at university before I applied for a job. Thus, I successfully passed the examination. However, other applicant failed at this easy test, even though they had the same academic degree as me. The reason for this outcome was that they did not participate in social activities at their university. This example illustrates that social activities are as important as academic classes since it will raise the chance of getting a job in the future. Hence, the university should consider investing money in social activities.
The second point worth discussing is related to students' health. Indeed, students are healthier when they involve in sport and physical activities. For instance, by playing soccer, humankind's heart pumps blood rapidly through a body, which means heart muscles will become stronger than before. The heart muscle's strength is of paramount importance for people because it has to do with heart diseases such as heart attack. Consequently, students can reduce the likelihood of getting heart diseases, as most people are suffering from these kinds of ailments. Considering this positive consequence for students, they will be in a healthier manner without taking medicines, allowing them to study better for class materials. However, the lack of physical exercises will lead to an increase in the possibility of becoming sick which reduces the time they spend on participation in university classes. Therefore, if universities dedicate equal financial support for college students for doing physical exercises, they certainly are healthier.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that college presidents must allocate money for their students. The students will gain the benefits of becoming healthful and getting a job in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...xercises, they certainly are healthier. In conclusion, according to above-mentio...
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...lthful and getting a job in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2718.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32941176471 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04791922644 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507843137255 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7799203154 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0714285714 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82142857143 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178236329144 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516570676632 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700109679586 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106601632731 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077944583398 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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