11.In times of an economic crisis, in which area should governments reduce their spending?
1. Arts
2. Scientific research
3. Parks and public gardens.
(The Preference type, three sides of the issue should be discussed, but focusing on one)
Today, in our modern society, it is possible for any government to suffer from the financial depression because of the unstable situation in economy. As one of the responsibilities of any government is to provide the best quality of life for their people, the state can limit the budget in some part of their costs. With this in mind, there are different viewpoints as to whether in which parts the government should reduce the money. Some believe that the arts is one of the non-essential parts in people life others believe otherwise. Personally, I subscribe to the latter group--that is—public parks’ budget should be reduced for some reasons, two of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, scientific research is the base of the development of any nations. All of the progress in human life has to with the research which are done with professor or students in universities, which get have obtained their budget from the government, and without the funding provided by government none of the academic individuals cannot perform anything in their research. In economic depression, this is the science that can help to suppress the hard situation. The scientific research can able the nation to surmount their obstacles or hindrance so much so that in economic crises, the nation will not depend on other countries for their supplies. Take for instance, my country that have experience a lot of sanction from some countries. Because of the sanction, the rate of gasoline was so high in our country and there were no ideas to solve this dependency to the import of gasoline. However, by providing some fund for scientific research in the area of oil, the researchers find a useful method to produce the gasolin in our country; therefore, we are no longer depend on other country for gasolin. If our government did not give that budget to scholar, there is no doubt our nation had experienced a disadvantageous situation which must not have been solved easily. On the other hand, it maybe true that parks are places that people spend their time to diminish the hard condition the have in their life, but in unfavorable economic condition, such places as parks are usually empty of crowd because people do not have enough time to spend there in such critical monetary crises, so considering money for them are just wasting the capital.
Another subtle point to mention is that Arts are one of the most significant source of income for the government and the nation. If the state provide the essential budget for the arts, the possibility of attracting more tourist is so high. As the arts are the culture of any nation such as music, dance, literature, and movies, as far as being known in the world for any nation is concerned, the arts play an important role in appealing more and more tourists, because what is interesting for aliens is the arts of any country. In this regard, in the financial crises, if the government reduce the necessary money for developing arts, what will happen as consequence? However, the public parks or gardens are the places that are ubiquitous in all around the world, so that all of us have seen in any city such parks, which do not have any intriguing aspect for attracting other individuals from other nations; therefore, the state should not allot budget to these places, instead, as it is generally sensed, the arts are the aspect of any nation which is new and interesting for others.
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please inform me that is it
please inform me that is it related to the topic?
Yes, It is related to the
Yes, It is related to the topic, but the structure is not exactly correct. The paragraphs are too long. The correct one:
1. introduction, suppose 'parks and public gardens' should be removed
2. the advantages of 'parks and public gardens'
3. however, arts are more important in this moment. first, second...
4. Scientific research are more important too. first, second...
5. conclusion
I wrote this in 30 minutes so
I wrote this in 30 minutes so I did not have time to write conclusion.
what do you think about the minimum score for this writing?
I wrote this in 30 minutes so
I wrote this in 30 minutes so I did not have time to write conclusion.
what do you think about the minimum score for this writing?
Because the introduction is
Because the introduction is too long, and two paragraphs are too long. the examples are too long. Make them shorter.
it can reach 21-22 in 30.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, as to, for instance, no doubt, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2882.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 587.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90971039182 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9222030514 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70963415496 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44804088586 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 907.2 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.4583333079 48.9658058833 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.684210526 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8947368421 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165291330002 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563352264831 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475619619234 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124957853725 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419595361687 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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