One of the paramount segments of upbringing our offspring is the power of the encouragement and its magnitudes. Due to its critical role in our children's nourishment, the abundance of controversial notions always exists among psychologist and parents. Although some people hold the view that offering money for school-age children's high grades might have detrimental consequences on their educational process, there are growing ideas who hold the opposite perspective. Admittedly, I advocate the second's groups viewpoint about money offering's profits for the child's long-term prosperity. Through ensuing paragraphs, the principal reason for my viewpoint will be elaborate.
First and foremost, offering the money for their high grade has a profound impact on their self-confidence. For illustration, the money makes them feel free and independence for providing their personal requirements. They can utilize that grant for whatever they have wished for and start being automotive in some part of their life. As the matter of the fact, self-reliance will fulfill their self-esteem and flourish their fundamental character. Besides, it is the great encouragement to appreciate their endeavors in their education. Practically, They need to perceive we don't take their attempts for granted and don't underestimate their efforts and for that purpose, we need to offer the most concrete and solemn tool in this contemporary world which is money.
Another compelling reason which is worthy to be considered is the fact that offering money enable our children to ponder about the value of money and it is the key to their upcoming prosperities in this money-worshiping society. Indeed, If we keep them apart from this truth that their supreme survival depends on the making more money and its managing processes, it is not far-fetched that they future financial and even personal life will encounter with catastrophic defeats. Accordingly, the burden of revealing the truth of the vigorous state of earning money and coping with it is on our shoulder as the responsible part of their life. Thus, I believe that offering money for their school's achievements will train them how valuable it is. Besides, it dictates them a clandestine message about the straight influence of their greater tries on the earning money.
In brief, all the aforementioned arguments lead us to the conclusion that offering money not only is an extraordinary and striking impression on our children's educational potency by encouraging them beneficially but also it has a prominent impact on their perception about the role of money on their future individual and economic life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, thus, apart from, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4382566586 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0873750108 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8305174934 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.117647059 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2941176471 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82352941176 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290779705328 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101045806663 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668102743625 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178241747569 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478684202783 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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