Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others think that change is always good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Activities are the characteristics of humans. People who live in this industrial age cannot avoid involving in specific situation that requires changing in behavior for almost every aspect. For some people, changing is always a corrosive thing, and they try to escape from it, in this case they practice the same action every day. While others argue that we should accept changing as the part of us, I prefer to accept the last mentioned argument, which analogs with boat on the seashore that going back and forth due to the waves until reaching the stable point.
Stability is the main reason why people react and avoid doing different kind of activities in their live. They prefer to follow tradition that gives them certainty for every chosen action. One of indigenous cultures in New Guinea, for instance, still lives in hunter-gather cultures even though the advancement of agricultural model is available today. If they choose to change their habits, however, they have to allocate a certain amount of time to study and adapt with new agricultural technology. It will take a lot of resources for them until they obtain a new skill. This option perhaps is not good and urgent for them. It is obvious that the transformation of behavior is not always good as the many people think.
Although behavioral transformation did not occur in some cultures and many people are dreaming about it, it is impossible for people who live in the high density technology to avoid it. Technology shapes humans to act efficiently. Before computer invited, people in China tended to use abacus for calculation, but as we know today that method is not efficient for big calculation. So, people in general adopt new calculation model. It also exists in broader sense that efficiency is always requiring changing than we expect. Even though that change seems beneficial for human live, drawback effect also occurs in some aspect. Research shows that fast food, which develops simultaneously with technological advancement, is the major causes of obesity.
In summary, although some people gain many benefit from adopting or not adopting new habit, it not always invents a good thing. The most crucial point to think is that people should try to find the possibilities and alternatives to be ready when they face it.
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