In a society, there have been always small businesses along with government-supported businesses that play crucial roles in growth of that society. Although small businesses are not as effective as government-supported businesses on people's lives, there is a controversy among people whether it is worthwhile to make it possible for small businesses to thrive, specially by reducing the government role in private sections of a society business.
To begin with, it should be mentioned that the government receives its support from national resources, like oil, gas, gold, etc. In this way, they have access to an almost infinite resource of money. According to this fact, if they enter to small business activities and affect their interaction in any way, they will deprive other small businesses from development since all the persons who invest their money in these kind of businesses do not have access to the national recourses and consequently, they will be easily wiped out in the competition of businesses where there is a government party acts as a rival.
The second point is that one of the most important factors that play a significant role in small businesses to thrive is money circulation. In other words, when money is circulated by small businesses, they will feel that there are opportunities to earn more or to expand the product rate. However, when government affects the private section of the business it manufacture a chain which connects the private businesses' money circulation to that money earned by exporting national resources. For instance, if there is small businesses who works in transit industry and there is not any evidnece of government presence in that subject, they can compete with each other and earn or lose money inn response to their creative or wrong desicions, respectively. After all, they are some how fighting with each other and if any of competitors fails to catch an opportunity, it would be other's opportunity.
Finally, government must play a minimal role in private business matters in order to have the authority of controling a small subject. Interestingly, if government loose the whole control of the small business, they will dictate hard situations like hight rate for a special good and people will suffer the outcomes, afterwards.
In conclusion, I believe that according to creating competition among small businesses, money circulation, and controlling the whole activities of small businesses, government should play a minimal role in private businesses area.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 415, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...l the persons who invest their money in these kind of businesses do not have access to the...
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Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'manufactures'?
Suggestion: manufactures
... the private section of the business it manufacture a chain which connects the private busi...
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Line 3, column 409, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'businesses'' or 'business's'?
Suggestion: businesses'; business's
...ture a chain which connects the private businesses money circulation to that money earned ...
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Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are small businesses'?
Suggestion: there are small businesses
...ng national resources. For instance, if there is small businesses who works in transit industry and there...
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Line 3, column 776, Rule ID: SOME_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somehow'?
Suggestion: somehow
...ions, respectively. After all, they are some how fighting with each other and if any of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, however, if, second, so, while, after all, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 403.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28287841191 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08890646543 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493796526055 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.13738048 60.3974514979 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.769230769 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 23.4991977007 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 5.21951772744 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404866791627 0.243740707755 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171452115247 0.0831039109588 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133468175385 0.0758088955206 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271375962272 0.150359130593 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811518149207 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 14.1392134831 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 48.8420337079 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.