Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Even though many sociologists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that the phenomena which occur around us especially around the world don’t related to us and we don’t need any information about them, I firmly recommend that when live in a same planet, we have to be aware of everything that happen even they don’t impact on our daily life. People should know and follow all events that happen. Due to helping to survive and help damaged people or regains and also this makes take more knowledge and information. And believe it or not, the humanist characters force him to uncover and explore what happen in world that he is living. I will elaborate my idea with some significant reasons in the following paragraphs.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my mind at first is that if people or societies follow natural or artificial events, they can try to help or give some condition and circumstances to that community for obtain better facilities. As an example, last month in our country, Kermanshah city, there was a catastrophic event which most of the families’ house destroyed and about six hundred people died. Needless to say, most of the countries around the world gave and sent some necessary tolls and foods to this cities. This way not only helped and prepared their basic requirements, but also they became more happy sue to other people paid attention to them.
Another my remarkable reasons is that when we want to start some projects or plan in large scales related to international, we need more data and information which helps us to what thing are connect to our project. For example, as I am a student in university, I select my thesis with polluted environment topic, when I wanted to select my subject, I was aware what happened in shore Pacific Ocean and many debris and plastics deposited on that and international government and some NGO groups decided to clear and collect them. As a matter of fact, these recent news in TV shows helped to find more information and also I joined in these groups.
As you can see, we are connect to a chain of events that we should be aware of all of event widely.
As a result, as we live in a same planet that most of occurrences are similar and might happen in our society or not. Actually some events have terrible subsequence which as a human we should know and help to improving that situation. As I am a sensitive person I often follow recent events that happen around the world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, for example, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69318181818 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65338451419 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513636363636 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.2921221084 48.9658058833 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.0625 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0625 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19260971949 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0705990239524 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643555020586 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1134789418 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069719457354 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.