Some people think spending a lot on birthday celebrations and wedding is a waste of money. Other think that it is important to the young people and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is generally said,"happiness are just like a butterfly when you keep, it goes far if you leave it comes away"and celebration of special occasions has a immense place in our life. Hence,there are argument both for spending money on birthday and marriage celebration is wastage or not.
To begin with,bounding strong relationship. As young people are in rat race of accomplishing money and success but much time is spent on computer because they have hectic sechdule so that less time is given to family members by young people in this situation celebration is the great way to be with reaports....
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Sentence: It is generally said,'happiness are just like a butterfly when you keep, it goes far if you leave it comes away'and celebration of special occasions has a immense place in our life.
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Sentence: To begin with,bounding strong relationship.
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Sentence: On the other hand a negative wind is also there, as universally accepted,'money is power'some people think a big amount of money is invested to orngnized a high class party to arranging verity of food, perfect place, excellent service and many more which are unnecessary things.
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Suggestion: Refer to to and orngnized
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Sentence: However, in this materialistic era, prices of living good and basic needed has more than double comparison of past so they do not have sufficient money to arrange a party but money has to borrowed by young only for flack image.
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Suggestion: Refer to needed and has
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Suggestion: Refer to to and borrowed
Sentence: As per my above discussion,it is evident that , spending a lot of money to celebrating parties is wastage of money and there are some another way which make us happy as well as more satisfied reather that parties.
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Suggestion: Refer to some
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Sentence: As young people are in rat race of accomplishing money and success but much time is spent on computer because they have hectic sechdule so that less time is given to family members by young people in this situation celebration is the great way to be with reaports.
Error: sechdule Suggestion: schedule
Error: reaports Suggestion: reports
Sentence: On the other hand a negative wind is also there, as universally accepted,'money is power'some people think a big amount of money is invested to orngnized a high class party to arranging verity of food, perfect place, excellent service and many more which are unnecessary things.
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Error: orngnized Suggestion: organized
Sentence: Hindustan magazine reveald that majority of young generation invest larger amounts of money on parties and having expensive dresses on those which are useless but they have to wear fashionable clothes for eye poping.
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Error: reveald Suggestion: reveal
Sentence: As per my above discussion,it is evident that , spending a lot of money to celebrating parties is wastage of money and there are some another way which make us happy as well as more satisfied reather that parties.
Error: reather Suggestion: No alternate word
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