TPO44- Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history managing time for relationship in the families played an important role in all civilized societies. Nowadays many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration in order to examine its constructive and destructive facets of this issue. Due to its paramount importance, huge steps have been taken to elevate its role. Some people may hold the view that having fun such as playing games or sports is a great way to spend time with children; in the meantime, some others may take an opposite point and believe that involving in schoolwork like assignments is a better way to spend with children. I believe that the former viewpoint generally carries more weight. In what follows, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
First of all, the first exquisite to be mention is that playing with children enhance the relationship between children and parents more especially when there is not enough time during the day. In fact, since modern parents are usually busy during the day they do not have abundant time to pay attention to their children. Thus, playing provide this opportunity to spend time exclusively to children and make themselves more close to their children. Actually, when children find their parents as their co-player during the game they feel more comfortable from their inside of their heart and amplify their inner boundaries.
In approaching this issue, apart from what mentioned above, there is another subtle point which must be borne in mind. playing games or sport provide a good situation for parents to observe their children. It is not only a way of entertainment, but also a good chance to see if their children have a psychological problem or an improper behavior. A vivid example which can be given to shed light on the subject is that a family who play a computer game together. It is possible for every of children to behave impolitely or out of order when they face with a hard situation like losing game. In this case, parents can observe their behavior and try to tackle it after the game or find the source of this rude behavior.
Although the aforementioned reasons are the first ones which cross the mind at first glance, there are by no means the only reasons available. The noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics revealed by a recent social research conducted in our country showed that children who play with their parents are more likely to be active and energetic in the school. This research has been done among students of one class in a school. They were divided to two groups; students who play mostly with their parents and the ones who do not.
In the final analysis, according to what was mentioned in the body paragraphs above, no one could deny the fact that the aforementioned subject is a controversial matter of discussion which needs to be elaborately addressed to precisely examine its aspect. Nevertheless, there is authentic evidence which can lead us to this conclusion that family should spend time with each other in spite of all busy schedule, especially playing games or sport as a mobile way of entertaining.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Playing
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, thus, apart from, in fact, such as, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2618.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95833333333 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72786188922 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501893939394 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7224878434 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307485233029 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862247176733 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079176040902 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165035028447 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763836278024 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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