In the modern society, schools are no longer necessary as we could have so much information throughout the internet that children could study at home as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that the ever advancement of virtual network technology has been encouraging people to put more value on the on-line study. Although one argument is that schools will be completely replaced by studying through the Internet, I firmly against with the opinion.
There is no doubt that students could derive some unique benefits from studying at school. First of all, school teaching is more capable than the Internet in cultivating a responsible and contributing generation. This has been proved by the walking examples that students, especially young children, always regard their teachers as role models. By imitating and listening to their teachers, students are able to learn to understand and share the value system of that society, thereby becoming capable individuals in the future. Additionally, teachers are more superior to computers in effectively imparting knowledge to children. This is because experienced teachers could change teaching methods according to the personality of different students, which can effectively enhance the teaching effects and learning outcomes.
Admittedly, those who support learning from the Internet may also possess some sound points. In particular, the ever deepening development of the Internet enables people to access information and knowledge with a just click of a button, providing a rather appealing and easy way of learning. However, compared with the teacher, computer are much inferior in performing different scenarios and providing multi-functional instructions, which is largely attributed to its nature that can only provide some rigid and repetitive displays and have little flexibility. Therefore, it is unreasonable to say that school-age children can acquire enough knowledge simply through studying from the virtual world.
In conclusion, although the Internet is an innovative way for people to acquire knowledge and information. I am in support of the idea that school education remains the most significance.
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Essay evaluation report
I firmly against with the opinion.
I am firmly against the opinion.
flaws:
1. in the topic , there is no this idea: schools will be completely replaced by studying through the Internet,
2. need to pay attention to the writing styles, you like to use: is/are, can/could, they are over used, look:
students could derive some unique benefits from studying at school.
school teaching is more capable than the Internet in cultivating a responsible and contributing generation.
students are able to learn to understand and share the value system of that society,
teachers are more superior to computers in effectively imparting knowledge to children.
This is because experienced teachers could change teaching methods according to the personality of different students, which can effectively enhance the teaching effects and learning outcomes.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 298 350
No. of Characters: 1654 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.155 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.55 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.938 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.085 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.549 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, in conclusion, in particular, no doubt, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67785234899 5.12529762239 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03763015739 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604026845638 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7567226873 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.857142857 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15443121751 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509010449581 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462592369129 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792976668014 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324001771805 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.66 12.4159519038 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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