Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is a place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Childhood is the most important part in terms of child development. In this Era what child Learns about life will remain in his mind for the rest of his life. Many believe that parents should teach children how to be a good member of society, while others argue that school is the place to learn this.This essay will discuss both these views.
To begin with, let us discuss argument first that some frequently believe that school is the place for child development propose several reasons for it. First and foremost is the reason that school going children spend significant amount of time at school during which they communicate with each other, and develop communication skills. Also, teachers play a vital role in character building by enhancing child's skills via different types of activities for example, by teaching sports,book reading and effective presentation skills. It is therefore thought that school is the best place to learn manners.
On the other hand, it is also a reality that a child spend most of his time at home and with his parents, so parents, and especially mother is the primary source of his learning especially in early preschool years. It is hence point of view of majority of people. It is often seen that a child who is brought up in a dysfunctional home will not become successful and may end up as a criminal. For instance, many criminals come from bad neighborhood and unstable families.
To conclude, although some believe that school is the best place for child development whereas, others claim parents have the responsibility. In my opinion, no doubt teachers and friends do have a role to play, but parents are the driving force in child rearing. In the future too, this will remain the golden rule of child's development.
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It is a good essay. This essay can reach 7.0 or over if you remove following two issues:
1. you may change the conclusion, from:
To conclude, although some believe that school is the best place for child development whereas, others claim parents have the responsibility. In my opinion, no doubt teachers and friends do have a role to play, but parents are the driving force in child rearing. In the future too, this will remain the golden rule of child's development.
to:
In my opinion, no doubt teachers and friends do have a role to play, but parents are the driving force in child rearing. In the future too, this will remain the golden rule of child's development.
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'To conclude, although some believe that school is the best place for child development whereas, others claim parents have the responsibility.' is like in introduction.
2. one more issue is:
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
it means you may give more difficult words.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
... that school is the place to learn this.This essay will discuss both these views. ...
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Line 3, column 485, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , book
...tivities for example, by teaching sports,book reading and effective presentation skil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, while, for example, for instance, no doubt, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64582690288 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573333333333 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.650755368 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6428571429 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2471882551 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841233687801 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124963708534 0.0667982634062 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154308107118 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.111512111655 0.056905535591 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 50.2224549098 134% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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