Shopping centres, became the places, where majority of teenagers spend most of their time. I’m totally agree with this statement as I have experienced crowds of youth, hanging out inside the climatised shops. For young people, shopping is something like a drug or sport activity which they couldn’t resist. Instead of spending their time for leisure in parks, beaches or playgrounds, their focus is one of the big shopping centres located around even the small cities. This essay will state my opinions and give examples.
With developing a shopping centres around the suburban areas, many of teenagers finding this place as a main point of their interest. There is a group of young people, who found shopping as a hobby and shopping centres giving them plenty of opportunities to shop and been entertain in a cinema or play zone while or after shopping. However, this habit has a negative influence to teens. With uncontrolled shopping, new generation will not be able to manage their finance. Independence in their young life and endless money from their guardians won’t learn them to manage their money in adult’s life.
From another hand, there is a second group of youth, who spend their spare time around a shopping centres. This group can be called vandals, or another side of teenage society. These teens don’t shop in a shopping centres, but hanging around a parking slots, between the buildings of shopping centre. As I could experienced, these youngsters make a graffiti on the walls, drinking alcohol, smoking weed and could be dangerous for shopping centre visitors. Nowadays this behaviour is not tolerated in metropolitan areas, as public is alert and reporting this behaviour to police, unfortunately environment around shopping centres, giving our young society this opportunity.
To summarise, adults should pay more attention what their kids doing after school and over the weekends. This era makes us living under pressure and been selfish, but as a parents we have to raise our children to prevent either dependence on shopping or unacceptable behaviour.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'entertained'.
Suggestion: entertained
...lenty of opportunities to shop and been entertain in a cinema or play zone while or after...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os;t learn them to manage their money in adult's life. From another hand...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'experience'
Suggestion: experience
...uildings of shopping centre. As I could experienced, these youngsters make a graffiti on th...
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Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a graffito' or simply 'graffiti'?
Suggestion: a graffito; graffiti
...ould experienced, these youngsters make a graffiti on the walls, drinking alcohol, smoking...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a parent' or simply 'parents'?
Suggestion: a parent; parents
...under pressure and been selfish, but as a parents we have to raise our children to preven...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1775.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26706231454 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73826632656 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587537091988 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8233406324 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.411764706 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.05882352941 7.06120827912 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327395952177 0.244688304435 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10481911014 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05279055552 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192885360631 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600847894037 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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