Have you ever gone shopping in your leisure time? Most of us have ever spent our free time in shopping centers at least once. However, spending too much time on shopping may affect our life in an unpleasant way. I strongly believe that spending so much leisure time going to shops is the reason for personal financial collapse and some mental diseases; likewise, this is a kind of wasting time.
To be exact, most people do not realize that they are wasting their time uselessly. Nowadays, more and more people, especially young boys and girls, are choosing shopping as a free time activity. They always want to buy new things, even the things which are necessary. Little by little, their money is wasted more and more. As a result, people’s finance is declining unconsciously. The society will be affected more or less.
In addition, some illnesses with mind can be caused by shopping too much. According to a professional Australian psychologist whose name is Randy Frost, shopping can affect people’s mind and cause a disease named “mental disturbance”. Similarly, the statistic of England psychology institute shows that over 80% of human in the world have symptoms of this sickness. Moreover, our nerves can be stimulated continuously by shopping. This can lead to cardiovascular diseases and even autism. Therefore, it can be said that shopping is destroying our life.
Furthermore, our leisure time is going by monotonously because we are spending too much of our free time on only shopping. Commonly, people who go shopping hardly ever pay attention to the time they spend. In fact, instead of going to the shops, they can do more useful things with families or relatives. Not only that, but this can also affect their studying or working seriously. For instance, even when working, a girl who is crazy about shopping can wander her work and think about the next shopping night, including where to go, what to buy, and so on. Because of those reasons, their time is wasting unsuitably and their social life is influenced severely.
Some people presumed that shopping was the best way to relax and feel less stressful. Notwithstanding, shopping is not the only way for relaxation and stress reduction. This is to say, playing games, going to the gym, listening to music, and so on, are also effective methods to feel better.
In summary, although shopping is one of the most interesting activities in leisure time, it causes more harm if we spend too much time on it. Shopping is supposed to be the essential cause of economic decrease, time waste and some mental sicknesses. Unfortunately, it is difficult to stop people, especially teenagers, from spending free time going shopping in malls uncontrollably because they are more and more addicted. Do you have any solutions?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, likewise, may, moreover, similarly, so, therefore, at least, for instance, in addition, in fact, in summary, kind of, as a result, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 13.1623246493 213% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 1615.20841683 146% => OK
No of words: 466.0 315.596192385 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05150214592 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85109399089 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523605150215 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 721.8 506.74238477 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4900243014 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1724137931 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0689655172 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.20689655172 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.9879759519 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312144570029 0.244688304435 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086281160094 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053184304625 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166076562759 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0427468303165 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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