An International development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While the seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered do decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recomendations.
The problem regarding the deficiency of vitamin A in one of the malnourish region namely Tagus has made the government have to make an action to diminish this issue. One body called the International Development organization comes up with a plausible solution in which it provide and introduce one typical of millet with high of vitamin A. However, another problem has emerged that the seed cost of this millet is much more expensive and the farmers have to pay the cost although they are already offered subsidy for purchasing milled seeds. Regarding this particular issue, I will give three critical responses which need to be addressed in order to improve the welfare of the members of society in Tagus.
Firstly, in terms of the reliability of the fact that new millet is one of the solutions which bring sufficient vitamin A to the people, I could not obtain related data or previous research result which ensures this millet containing more vitamins. I think that it needs long process to engineer the new millet and to be ready consumed safely by the people, due to the fact that the breeding this milled needs more experiment process in the controlled conditions. As a result, government has to provide more budgets to this organization in conducting the prior research before selling the products to the farmers.
More importantly, considering the health of the society, the authority has to proceed the appropriate schema of this new millet. Before making a serious decision to support this millet, the stakeholder have to collaborate with scientists and local farmers, making a negotiation in terms of the effect of this millet to the society, which process can be done in order to strengthen the vitamin A in millet, is the farming process is necessity. If yes, them how the appropriate method to yield this seeds to be grow and harvested in huge amount of products which can be consume with a lot of nutrients for the people.
Finally, regarding the money that has been subsided to the farmers, I think that the government has to think about the fair sharing of this money. If the farmers cannot have much money to buy the seeds how can they yield it right away, and how can the society consume the millet which has high vitamin. I think that, before thinking the way to process and support this millet and intent to combat the deficiency, the government has to consider how realistic this method is, and how the application of this plan can be done successfully and accepted by all of the realms such as farmers, organization and community.
In conclusion, I believe these three main arguments are vitally important to be taken into account.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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flaws:
the arguments are on the wrong track.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 454 350
No. of Characters: 2164 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.616 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.767 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.624 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.408 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.396 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provides'?
Suggestion: provides
...p with a plausible solution in which it provide and introduce one typical of millet wit...
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Line 4, column 553, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...an be done successfully and accepted by all of the realms such as farmers, organization an...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, regarding, so, then, as to, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2208.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86343612335 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68811280189 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455947136564 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.3406347325 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.714285714 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4285714286 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.70786347227 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311254178016 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109754678793 0.0743258471296 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595714804778 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159396578339 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0945968430607 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.3799401198 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 48.3550499002 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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