TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to

Nowadays, we are living in very dynamic world. We can touch the fast movement of our daily lives and our daily activities. Many changes had been done at many fields around us. I am sure that some people will agree that becasue thw world is changing so fast, people now are less happy than before, while others might disagree with that. However, I am totally agree that people are so happy and satisfied with these changes than before for two important reasons, which I will demonstrate in the following essay.

To begin with, nowadays, we have more advanced technologies every where that help people to enjoy their lives. We can find more changes at schools, works, sportrs, cinemas, computers and entertainments. I believe that these changes let people get their work done easier than before. For instance, I used to work as a pharmacy technician at independent pharmacy. I need to search for answers for many questions everyday. For example. I need to know much information about how patients should take their medications, what is the rights dose and directions for many drugs. In addition, I meet many people everday ask me many questions about topics that I do not have any clue about them. So, I have to search about the appropite answers for these issues. In the past, I used to write down all these questions and look at hundreds of books to get the answers. In fact, that way was so hard and took me so long. On ther other hand, nowadays, I can open my phone and saerch on google about any topic and i can get the answer in just a minute. I believe the modern technology like new cell phones and computer gave me a good opportunity to save time and effort. So, I can enjoy this time with my family or even to improve my work in the same time. As you can see, this experience taught me that the new way of technologies made our lives easier than before. In addition, people became happier with these dynamic world.

In addition, we have the most up to date ways of treatment for many chronic diseases which help many people to cure faster than before. We can see every day that someone discovered new drug to treat a specific disease. Difinitely, if we have a good manner to treat people from their suferring they would be more happy and more satisfied. For example, my grandmother was suffering from breast cancer for along time. Moreover, there was not any ,medication for cancer. So, all my family were in pain and sadness because of her. On ther other hand, we can find now many chempothearapies for many types od cancer all over the world. In fact, my grandmother started her medication and now she feels much better. In addition, she can do her daily activities by her self. So, my whole family are so happy and we can see her in a better case. This experience was a good example of the modern way of technology and how these tremendous change were the secret behind the happines of many people around us.

In sum, I believe that people are so happy and more satisfied with that fast changes. This is because their lives became more easier, and becasue they found new waies to treat their patient. So they are more happier than before. I strongly agree that we have to ecourge these fast changes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: agreed
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Suggestion: everywhere
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Suggestion: every day
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Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
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Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
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...ies to treat their patient. So they are more happier than before. I strongly agree that we h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 85.0 43.0788530466 197% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2642.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 578.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57093425606 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90322654589 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41572307253 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449826989619 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 840.6 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 29.0 9.59856630824 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.6003584229 170% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4781665631 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4857142857 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5142857143 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91428571429 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264078536964 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0667609448695 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740012399794 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192444820166 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761689754016 0.0645574589148 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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