Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Concerning the issue whether people nowadays spend too much of their time doing their favorite activities instead of doing things that are necessary to them, people hold different opinions. Some people strongly assert that many young people are working hard as the day passes to contribute to the development of our society and hardly have any time left to relax, let alone doing what they like. The rest do not accede to this way of thinking and claim that the abovementioned situation is exactly opposite to what is really happening in real life and that many people are distracted from their essential jobs because of their considerable attention put on the activities that they enjoy. As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the idea that many people in the 21st century are becoming ignorant of what they should do and focus too much on doing the things they like.
To start out with, the reasons why I believe that people are spending too much time on doing what they love rather than doing important things are innumerable and that their proliferating obsession with modern technology is undeniably a major one. Internet and modern technologies such as televisions, smartphones have been dominating people's daily life in the recent years thanks to the rapid development of sciences. These technologies have no doubt brought many benefits to human beings, and one of it is the inexhaustible entertainment sources. Because of the joys they can gain from using social media, people start to become addicted to these technologies and can spend their whole day gluing their eyes to their smartphones' or televisions' screens. Their craze for just a few clicks on the phone gradually accumulates and eventually play a role in distracting them from their important tasks. As you can see, because people's obsession with social media is surging with a fast pace, they will spend most of their time browsing the internet or watching television programs instead of doing their important jobs.
Another reason why I deem that young people spend too much time on their personal enjoyment and forget what they should do is their illusion of their stressful life and urgent need for relax. Certainly, it is completely necessary for people to have free time to relax and pursue their hobbies. Nonetheless, in most cases, people usually overstep the boundary and allow themselves a considerable amount of time spent on relaxing. By way of illustration, consider a case in my father's company. One of my father's colleagues was reported to always run late on his assignments because the time he spent on the tasks is very little compared to the time he spent on his leisure activities. As he was threatened to be fired from the job, he started to seek for the fundamental reason why he always lacked time to do his jobs and had profuse time when it comes to his personal interests. His poor time management was caused mainly by his illusion that for any young people, life must always be burdensome and strenuous because of their paying too much attention to their careers and having almost no time to relax. This idea led him to believe that his work was stressful, and, thus, he would need to spend more time to relax for the sake of his mental and physical well-being. This story taught me that young people can spend much of their time on their leisure activities and little on their necessary tasks due to their flawed idea of the stressful office work.
In brief, for the reasons explored above, I adopt a firm position that in the overwhelming majority of instances, young people spend too much of their time relaxing and pursuing their interests instead of putting effort in their important work.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, nonetheless, really, so, thus, well, in brief, no doubt, such as, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3071.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 631.0 407.700716846 155% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86687797147 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01195704033 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60968408983 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451664025357 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 942.3 618.680645161 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.3775242689 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.55 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.55 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29692877578 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113342462051 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120742122021 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207245558421 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115229031819 0.0645574589148 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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