Scientist and Tourist travel to remote natural environments, such as South Pole. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

With the proliferation of contemporary lifestyle comes a wide range of the socio-economic phenomenons. Discovering isolated areas is remained as a source of major controversy. from my perspective, I think the disadvantages outweigh its advantages.

On the one hand, people reaching to such distant and bleak places means the technology progression has made an other break through.scientific breakthrough All the needed travelling equipment and professional guidance were not just for scientific research studies, normal people could participate in such dangerous and challengeable exploration, illustrating that places like South Pole are not mysterious to humankind and increasingly more scientific discoveries would be unveiled. Besides, this trend has boosted tourism since many tour packages heading to remote areas have came into market, attracting many explorers’ attention, thus raising the selling of outdoor equipment.

On the other hand, after stepping on the land of those remote places, the continuing human activity could have a devastating effect on the local environment and eco-system. For example , since number of people who could step on the land of North pole has been increasing, rate of poaching and hunting has also surged and many species such as penguins , polar bears, foxes areon the verge of extinction. On top of that, local environment have been exploited, the best illustration is the combustible ice in the north pole, the amount of which experienced a plunge in recent years ,since scientists have found out that this kind of ice could be used as a new energy source. And the result of this was that ices have been cracked and habitats of many species have been destroyed, and animals were forced to search another place to live.

In conclusion, as a result of these aforementioned reasons, the disadvantages of travelling to remote areas outweigh its advantages.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (3 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, thus, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, on the other hand, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47118644068 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21868968201 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613559322034 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.218444704 49.4020404114 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 161.4 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148591425847 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582485309085 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617331612038 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102295194472 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453507443447 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.1 13.0946893788 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.04 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.05 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 9.78957915832 179% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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