If you could change one important thing about your hometown what would you change Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer

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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

If I could change one aspect of my city, I would definitely change the way which it works. There are many things going wrong currently in various fields of endeavor.
First of all, with the politician system that is taking extremely the wrong path. For instance, each four years that follow a new major assume the position however, he/she wants to make up new things. These are needless to create due to the lack of sources provided by the city. Therefore, everyone carps unsuccessfully which generate more outcries in a society wanting the major dismissment.
Moreover, another factor that is disturbing society is the desideratum of public university. Each following year there has been an increasing in private university which demands money from student and not everyone can afford but only a selected community. Thus, with more public university would give a chance for everyone who craves for knowledge.
Furthermore, another key factor that would change the way which my city function is employment generation. This would contribute not merely to my home town but also to the community as a whole. Every year companies are laying off employees and the unemployment rate is astoundingly and exponentially increasing.
Finally, I am certain that once improving those qualities above mentioned would surely change my city and I would be extremely happy if I could participate in such an accomplishment.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1183.0 1977.66487455 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 228.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18859649123 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89557071987 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644736842105 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3208250664 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120729694422 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405444008359 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652129975311 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799537623242 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734573442669 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.6 Out of 6.0
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, for instance, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 52.1666666667 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1183.0 1977.66487455 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 228.0 407.700716846 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18859649123 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.48103885553 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89557071987 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.644736842105 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 618.680645161 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3208250664 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5384615385 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120729694422 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405444008359 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652129975311 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799537623242 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734573442669 0.0645574589148 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.6 Out of 6.0
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.