In 1992, many farmers in Jalikistan began using a hormone designed to produce larger cows that would produce more milk. Since then, childhood obesity in Jalikistan has grown by 200 percent. The amount of milk and dairy consumed by children in this area has not increased or decreased. Children in the same area who are lactose intolerant, and who drink almond milk or soy milk, have not had the same increase in childhood obesity. The only clear explanation is that the introduction of the hormone is responsible for the increase in childhood obesity in that area.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more viable alternatives to the proposed explanation. Justify, with support, why the alternatives could rival the proposed explanation and explain how those explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The author of the argument posit that the recent increase in childhood obesity is clearly caused by the use of cow milks. Also, assumes that the use of hormones on the cow has produced larger supply of milk, which in turn led to increase in obesity. And further suggest that the use of hormones on the cow should be stopped, in order to reduce the level of obesity in Jalikistan. As this might be truth, the premises on which the argument lies on is weak.
It could have been possible that there is no causal relationship between consumption of milk and obesity, and if probably the consumption of milk increases the chances of obesity among children, it could have been possible that any milk could have caused obesity. Probably, those who consumed cow milk also consumed other type of milk or combined it with other types of food which causes obesity.
In addition, if the cow milk is actually a factor for the increase in obesity, there could have been other factors causing the increase in milk production by the cow other than the use of the hormones. For example, maybe the cow now feed well or more attention is given to the cow that makes them produce more milk, and maybe it is not the use of the hormones that causes increase in milk production rate.
More so, it could have been possible that the current obesity in this locality is an endemic, and happens at a particular season, and those who are wealthy enough to eat good food will not probably be a victim of the disease. We can assume that those who did not drink the soy or almond milk could not afford it, hence, purchasing the cow milk, and those persons who could not also purchase the soy or almond milk also could not afford to eat other good food or access public health care.
Conclusively, the authors argument is less substantial and will only be valid if scientific research is carried out to show that the only cause of obesity among children is use the use of cow milk, and also that the use of the hormones on the cow caused an increase in production of milk by the cow. Until then, the authors argument is invalid
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- In 1992 many farmers in Jalikistan began using a hormone designed to produce larger cows that would produce more milk Since then childhood obesity in Jalikistan has grown by 200 percent The amount of milk and dairy consumed by children in this area has no 77
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 1679 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.395 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.24 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.194 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.449 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.449 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.215 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... public health care. Conclusively, the authors argument is less substantial and will o...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ion of milk by the cow. Until then, the authors argument is invalid
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, if, may, so, then, well, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50261780105 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30824152721 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.408376963351 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.0414751214 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.333333333 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.8333333333 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281182306469 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120628747353 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629467540356 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174414621771 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528985800381 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.5979740519 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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