The author in this statement wants to allocating a huge share of budget, in the incoming year, for advertising , which can solve the conundrum of fewer people attending the Super Screen Movie. I do not agree with this conclusion due to many baseless assumptions and lack of evidence.
Firstly, the market report cant not be believed.it does not provide any statistical evidence . Super Screen production may hire a statistics consultant so that he could provide the actual statistics and give evidence that the marketing report is correct or not. Fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies might be because the lesser capacity of theaters and the lesser number of theaters.
Secondly, the author erroneously assume that the quality of Super Screen produce movies are very good. Might be the content of Super Screen movies were not. May be people want some drama, romance, action , comedy in a single, but producer is not able to provide all this in one movie. So need to improve anecdote, cast, direction ,screen play etc. to augument the audience.
Also, the author says that the content of Super Screen produced movie reviews is not reaching enough to the viewers. this statement is bogus, because now a days everyone is aware of everything. Internet provide each and every information about the everything. they still don't want to come because of the bad quality of ambiance, worse facilities, and high charges of tickets.
To increase the the prospective viewers, they should improve the quality of ambiance, give discount on tickets. there should be some family packages so that people are automatically attracted. Production should hire a statistical consultant for actual statistic, so that author can bolster his argument. Otherwise I do not agree with this argument.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1452 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.007 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.568 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.093 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The author in this statement wants to allocating a huge sha...
^^
Line 1, column 112, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...t, in the incoming year, for advertising , which can solve the conundrum of fewer ...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...less assumptions and lack of evidence. Firstly, the market report cant not be b...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 34, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ence. Firstly, the market report cant not be believed.it does not provide any...
^^^^
Line 2, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...oes not provide any statistical evidence . Super Screen production may hire a stat...
^^
Line 2, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Screen production may hire a statistics consultant so that he could provide the ...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ers and the lesser number of theaters. Secondly, the author erroneously assume ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... people want some drama, romance, action , comedy in a single, but producer is not...
^^
Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...eed to improve anecdote, cast, direction ,screen play etc. to augument the audienc...
^^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en play etc. to augument the audience. Also, the author says that the content o...
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Line 4, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e content of Super Screen produced movie reviews is not reaching enough to the vi...
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Line 4, column 123, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
... is not reaching enough to the viewers. this statement is bogus, because now a days ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ewers. this statement is bogus, because now a days everyone is aware of everything. Intern...
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Line 4, column 209, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...eryone is aware of everything. Internet provide each and every information about the ev...
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Line 4, column 209, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Internet) must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...eryone is aware of everything. Internet provide each and every information about the ev...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 250, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'everything'?
Suggestion: the; everything
...rovide each and every information about the everything. they still dont want to come because o...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 266, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...every information about the everything. they still dont want to come because of the ...
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Line 4, column 277, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...mation about the everything. they still dont want to come because of the bad quality...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cilities, and high charges of tickets. To increase the the prospective viewers,...
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Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...gh charges of tickets. To increase the the prospective viewers, they should improv...
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Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...gh charges of tickets. To increase the the prospective viewers, they should improv...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 69, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pective viewers, they should improve the quality of ambiance, give discount on ti...
^^
Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... of ambiance, give discount on tickets. there should be some family packages so that ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed. Production should hire a statistical consultant for actual statistic, so that...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...o that author can bolster his argument. Otherwise I do not agree with this argument.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 55.5748502994 52% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 289.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17647058824 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6723566305 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539792387543 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.161268202 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1111111111 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0555555556 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.27777777778 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.25449101796 476% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269578240276 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080117757587 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954842625467 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145222143419 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780537278812 0.0628817314937 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.