The advertising director suggests that Super Screen Movie Production Comapny should allocate a greater share of its budget next year in order to increase prospective viewers by advertising is spurious, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
Initially, it is proffered that a recent report from marketing department suggests that fewer people attended thr Super Screen produced movies last year than in any other year. There could be various reasons to that. First, the movie produced less movies overall in the past year than in preceeding years. Second, the content of the movies produced was not liked by the people, who enjoyed the previous movies because of a different genre. Finally the writer talks about this year only,there is a matter of preference here. People, overall did not go to the movies this year and the viewership was relatively low and the trend may change next year by itself and people would prefer to watch more movies. The failure of writer to take these factors into account renders this claim unsound.
Secondly, the author mentions that the percentage of positive movie reviews about specific Super Screen movies had actually increased throught the last year. Here, the fact that the positive reviews have only increased for some particular movies and that people may came to watch those movies but not the ones that were not reviewed or written about is utterly disregarded. Also, the writer says percentage of reviews. Doest that mean that the number of reviewers of the movie rose during the past year? Do the movies did not get good reviews before? Had the writer acknowledged these assumptions and provided us any information regarding those, the claim would not have been invalid.
Lastly, the director claims that the problem does not lie with the quality of the movies since they are getting positive criticism. But the unavailability of information about the reviewers critiquing the quality of the movie or the content of the movie like story, acting and direction calls into question the veracity of this claim. If there was any data provided that suggested what was encompassed in the reviews, the assertion would have been justified.
Thus, the argument that Super Screen Movie Production Company should increase its budget for advertising to attract more audience fails to make a cogent case and lacks substantial information to prove its conclusion.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Initially, it is proffered that a recent report from marketing department suggests that fewer people attended thr Super Screen produced movies last year than in any other year.
Error: thr Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: First, the movie produced less movies overall in the past year than in preceeding years.
Error: preceeding Suggestion: proceeding
Sentence: Secondly, the author mentions that the percentage of positive movie reviews about specific Super Screen movies had actually increased throught the last year.
Error: throught Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly. better:
it may reached to people, but people may watch online, by DVD, by phone...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 391 350
No. of Characters: 1975 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.447 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.051 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.466 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.722 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.562 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.056 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun movies is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...sons to that. First, the movie produced less movies overall in the past year than in...
^^^^
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...us movies because of a different genre. Finally the writer talks about this year only,t...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , there
...ly the writer talks about this year only,there is a matter of preference here. People,...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 454, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iews. Doest that mean that the number of reviewers of the movie rose during the p...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, lastly, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 390.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18974358974 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53557981989 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520512820513 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1653758182 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.444444444 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05555555556 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.501537682347 0.218282227539 230% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156341317307 0.0743258471296 210% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136156880017 0.0701772020484 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245005078028 0.128457276422 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132967612409 0.0628817314937 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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