An ancient, traditional remedy for insomnia — the scent of lavender flowers — has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored electronically. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. At the beginning of the second week, the volunteers discontinued their sleeping medication. During that week, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. Therefore, the study proves that lavender cures insomnia within a short period of time.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the study conducted, the author concludes that the use of lavender can be considered as a remedy to treat insomnia and a three weeks observation has been conducted to prove the fact that insomnia can cure the sleeplessness of the individuals. However, the author has made his argument using some assumptions that if not substantiated will dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all the author claims that a 3 week test have show a significant improvement in the sleeplessness of the patients suffering from insomnia. However, the author has conducted it on a sum of 30 people and proved that this can be widely used for all the other insomnia patients. First, there is no evidence that these 30 people have used the lavender scented perfume after the test and still experience same results concluded from the observation. Second, the author mentioned that the controlled room was used to ensure the observants sleep peacefully. As a matter of fact the controlled room might help people sleep and once they are back to their normal routine they started to face the sleeplessness again. If either of the case is true, the author’s claim about the conclusions from the observation are not warranted and his recommendations for using lavender scent does not hold water.
Second of all, the author presumes that electronic device used for monitoring sleep had gave him the accurate results and information about a person sleeping. It is likely that the device can conclude if a person lying on a bed or does not move a lot or closed his eyes as sleeping. In such case, the electronic device results can not be considered as a genuine ones to conclude the argument. Perhaps, people might just acted as they sleept and pretended to support the observation because they will be paid for participating in such experiments. If any of these scenerios hold true, the author’s contention that people can use lavender essence to treat suffering from insomnia is not overly persuasive.
Finally, even if it is true that people can get sound sleep after using lavender scent, the author’s experiment results still hold flaws. Let us talk about the tiredness author described when people started to use lavender scent. People started to feel more tired in second week and author had not mentioned anything related to tiredness in third week. Hiding the tired result can make people suspect if there is an increase in the tiredness and it is the reason for the author to not to mention anything about it. There is another possibility that the claim saying “the volunteers slept longer” can be concludes as over sleep than what is normally required. If it is true that author has given partial feedback about the survey , then the author’s assertions are not valid, and his suggestion to use lavender scent will do a little convince people suffering insomnia to use the scent to cure their sleeplessness.
In conclusion, it is possible that lavender scent can treat the issue of insomnia and provide a sound sleep. However, as it stands now, the author has made his argument that relies on three unfounded assumption that render its conclusion unpersuasive at best and specious at worst. Thus, the author has to provide additional evidence to convince audience regarding the study conduced in multiple sleeping environments to convince people that lavender can be used to treat the insomnia.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 570 350
No. of Characters: 2786 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.886 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.888 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.71 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 193 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 113 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.762 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.35 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'given'.
Suggestion: given
...ic device used for monitoring sleep had gave him the accurate results and informatio...
^^^^
Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'one'?
Suggestion: one
...ults can not be considered as a genuine ones to conclude the argument. Perhaps, peop...
^^^^
Line 4, column 728, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... given partial feedback about the survey , then the author’s assertions are not va...
^^
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'assumption' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'assumptions'.
Suggestion: assumptions
...argument that relies on three unfounded assumption that render its conclusion unpersuasive...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, still, then, third, thus, as to, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2850.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 570.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88617158649 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79435443938 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.431578947368 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 877.5 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2633120535 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.545454545 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.59090909091 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209425522649 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738047516954 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535282630187 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138829234856 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405256213726 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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