Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The speaker argues that the Super Screen Movie Production Company should allocate a greater share of coming year's budget focussing in advertisement by indicating that the reason of less attendance of people in movie last year is mainly due to lack of awareness on people about the good quality production of movie from that company. The speaker mention the review of movie viewer from past year in order to bolster his conclusion. The argument seems plausible at first glance , however, under meticulous analysis, it suffered from some severe flaws.The speaker, therefore, must give the answer of some questions before reaching the conclusion.
First off, the author assumes that the number of attendee last year is the sole indicator for the number of people attending in coming days. The data of one year , however, cannot provide us enough support for prediction of future. And hence , the speaker must comes out with the statistical data of the presence of the people in previous years ,and based on those data, comparison will be reliable. Perhaps, in the previous year, Most of the people of that locality may have drain abroad and it could be a reason for that decrease in the attendie. May be the increase residents of people in this locality increase the number of movie viewer this year. Hence , in order to back the argur conclusion, this question need to be adressed muticulously.
Second, the author assumes that the positive review from the viewer foresee the improved quality of the movies. How can we easily accept that the review is representative of all the moview viewer from past many years? Perhaps , the reviewer of the movie were the relatives of the producer, or may be the movie this time is best of all the movies company ever produced. Without details on about the reviewer , their representative participation, it will be render fallacy to assume improved quality of movie.
Thirdly, the author assumes that advertisement is the crucial factor affecting no attrition of movie viewer and hence advertisement should be given priority. This is a more striking flaws that the author assume. Perhaps, there are other factors for decreasing no of viewer: another producer company establishing nearby, ticket price of movie, and location of the movie company. Without detail research in this factors, it is implausible to draw on conclusion hastily.
In sum, the speaker argument is well-presented but far-fetched with lot of questions to be answered. The striking questions to be solved are whether the past year data is sole reason for predicting quality of movie, validity of review from reviewer, and other possible contributing factors for decrease in number of viewer. If the speaker comes up with the answer of these questions, then speaker's argument will be accepted, otherwise, the argument render specious
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 464 350
No. of Characters: 2314 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.641 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.987 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.605 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.719 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.098 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'mentions'.
Suggestion: mentions
...of movie from that company. The speaker mention the review of movie viewer from past ye...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ear in order to bolster his conclusion. The argument seems plausible at first glanc...
^^^
Line 1, column 476, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...argument seems plausible at first glance , however, under meticulous analysis, it ...
^^
Line 1, column 550, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...sis, it suffered from some severe flaws.The speaker, therefore, must give the answe...
^^^
Line 1, column 550, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...sis, it suffered from some severe flaws.The speaker, therefore, must give the answe...
^^^
Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ing in coming days. The data of one year , however, cannot provide us enough suppo...
^^
Line 5, column 242, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...port for prediction of future. And hence , the speaker must comes out with the sta...
^^
Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...presence of the people in previous years ,and based on those data, comparison will...
^^
Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'drained'.
Suggestion: drained
...of the people of that locality may have drain abroad and it could be a reason for tha...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 554, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... for that decrease in the attendie. May be the increase residents of people in thi...
^^
Line 5, column 659, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... number of movie viewer this year. Hence , in order to back the argur conclusion, ...
^^
Line 9, column 226, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...iew viewer from past many years? Perhaps , the reviewer of the movie were the rela...
^^
Line 9, column 407, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...d. Without details on about the reviewer , their representative participation, it ...
^^
Line 13, column 261, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... there are other factors for decreasing no of viewer: another producer company est...
^^
Line 13, column 406, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...vie company. Without detail research in this factors, it is implausible to draw on c...
^^^^
Line 17, column 269, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...review from reviewer, and other possible contributing factors for decrease in num...
^^
Line 17, column 317, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...buting factors for decrease in number of viewer. If the speaker comes up with the...
^^
Line 17, column 392, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...ith the answer of these questions, then speakers argument will be accepted, otherwise, t...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 463.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15766738661 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71779662621 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475161987041 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2385881309 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.4 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.15 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198782435864 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604901032101 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650426536035 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118037095973 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890729145707 0.0628817314937 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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