Essay topics: The following appears in a letter to the editor for the West Lansburg News:
"The tufted groundhog lives in the coastal wetlands of West Lansburg. Ancient records suggest that the tufted groundhog once numbered in the millions. Since they were declared a wildlife sanctuary in 2004, development along the coastal wetlands has been prohibited. Now local development interests are lobbying for the West Lansburg council to allow an access road to be built along the edge of wetlands. Neighboring Eastern Carpenteria, which had a similar sanctuary, has seen its sea otter population decline since the repeal of its sanctuary status in 1978. In order to preserve the region's biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment, the West Lansburg council should not allow the road to be built."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The topic was about West Lansburg decided to build a road alongside coastal wetland and the author claimed that the groundhog lives in that area and the population of groundhog will be declined similar to the laboring Eastern Carpenteria area the sea otter population declined as it lost his sanctuary status. the argument is based on unwarranted reasons and the argument is flawed for the following reasons.
First of all, the author claimed that the development of the coastal area was prohibited since the area declared as a sanctuary and the records suggest that the population of groundhog was in millions. Though the author does not provide any information about the number of exact population of the groundhog and what is the current population of them. It might be possible that due to the declination of the groundhog the area was declared as a sanctuary but not they do not need any attention and the area is suitable for the burgeon of their population. So, there is no need to be considered the area as a sanctuary.
Another claimed the author made that the effect on the West Lansburg will be similar to the nabouring area where sanctuary status repealed and as a result, the sea otter population was declined. The author made a false analogy argument by comparing both areas and assume the population of different species and their living condition is the same. It might be possible that the sea otter population was declined due to weather change or the majority population was transferred to a new area. The author also claimed that the biodiversity of that region will be destroyed if the road was built. it might possible that the road is going to built nowhere near the sanctuary. The author assumed that the council did not try to save the population of the groundhog. It might be possible that the council already made a plan for the groundhog or decided to transfer them to the nearby sanctuary.
The argument is flawed for the above reasons and based on unwarranted arguments. The author failed to provide any convincing data which can bolster the author's claims.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1709 1500
No. of Different Words: 139 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.774 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.614 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.538 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.97 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.385 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 311, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...clined as it lost his sanctuary status. the argument is based on unwarranted reason...
^^^
Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... attention and the area is suitable for the burgeon of their population. So, there is no ne...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 594, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ill be destroyed if the road was built. it might possible that the road is going t...
^^
Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: GOING_TO_VBD[1]
Message: 'Going to' requires the base form: 'build'
Suggestion: build
...ight possible that the road is going to built nowhere near the sanctuary. The author ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85474860335 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65447795961 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.40782122905 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.29045203 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.866666667 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8666666667 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139832877248 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.050753600044 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499672007241 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.097017946628 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602353559137 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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