Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
The argument claims that in-order to enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors which is in regulation from 15 years. The argument stated in that way fails to mention several key factors on the bases of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions and some events with no clear evidence. Therefore, the statement us rather weak, unconvincing and has several flaws.
Firstly, as stated ,Since the time of evaluation of professors has started, that Omega professors have begun assigning higher grades to students. And hence overall grade average at omega has raised by 30 Percent.this statement is unviable to me.The bonding between students and professors may have progressed due to this scheme of evaluation. Since, 15 years is a long time, there could be possibilities of lot many changes during this period.For example, the syllabus of the college subjects may have changed which might have improved the grades of students.The students might have suggested the professors to include some subjects of there interest. This might have lead to more invlovement of students in their studies. Furthermore, after obtaining the evaluation from students the professors might have worked on their weaknesses and have come over it. This might have led to improvised lectures hence, have directly affected the grades of students.
Secondly, arguement states that potential employers looking at this dramatic raise in grades, believe that the grades in omega infalted and not reflect any student achievments. This statement has no legs to stand. Statement would have been much clearer if a proper evident was given about the belief they have. We dont know on what bases they came to this conclusion. This is not a cogent thought as they have not taken into consideration of all other factors. The drastic fall in the number of students getting jobs might be the effect of several other factors. For instance, the students might be looking for starting their own business and hence not looking for job. This could be the huge posssibilty and in addition to that there is a possibilities of students going for higher education or some more degrees and hence not looking for job since after one degree.
However, It is also mentioned that the students of Alpha University are highly successful in getting jobs than Omega University. Even though this might be true. On the contrary, I can say that the statement is not accurate. It is weak and unsupported. There might be different reasons for this. For instance, It could be argued that the number of intakes of Alpha university might have increased in recent years. One cannot deny that this statement is weighty. If the number of students are more then there will obviously be higher success rate in obtaining jobs. On the other hand , the type of jobs offered to students graduated from Alpha universities are varying from the type of jobs offered to students at Omega university. The students from Omega University might not be getting good jobs due to fall in Job rate in their city. Hence one can also say that job opportunities for students of Omega University is hindered due to lack of opening in there city or state.
In summary, to wind up, the argument is flawed and therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened by giving some clear evidences like were exactly the two Universities situated and also answering the questions like , What were the bases on which Potential employers had this belief. In order to access the merits in certain situation, it is essential to have full knowledge of all contributing factors.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: This might have lead to more invlovement of students in their studies.
Error: invlovement Suggestion: involvement
Sentence: Secondly, arguement states that potential employers looking at this dramatic raise in grades, believe that the grades in omega infalted and not reflect any student achievments.
Error: infalted Suggestion: inflated
Error: achievments Suggestion: achievements
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: This could be the huge posssibilty and in addition to that there is a possibilities of students going for higher education or some more degrees and hence not looking for job since after one degree.
Error: posssibilty Suggestion: possibility
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1
argument 3 -- OK
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 32 15
No. of Words: 608 350
No. of Characters: 3003 1500
No. of Different Words: 272 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.966 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.632 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 206 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 116 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 74 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.785 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.268 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.441 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mega University should terminate student evaluation of professors which is in reg...
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...e bases of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions and ...
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...ch it could be evaluated. The conclusion relies on assumptions and some events wi...
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...several flaws. Firstly, as stated ,Since the time of evaluation of professo...
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...ercent.this statement is unviable to me.The bonding between students and professo...
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Line 8, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...e to me.The bonding between students and professors may have progressed due to th...
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... long time, there could be possibilities of lot many changes during this period....
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...of lot many changes during this period.For example, the syllabus of the college su...
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...ht have improved the grades of students.The students might have suggested the profe...
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Line 18, column 137, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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...as given about the belief they have. We dont know on what bases they came to this c...
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Line 21, column 60, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are a possibilities'?
Suggestion: there are a possibilities
...uge posssibilty and in addition to that there is a possibilities of students going for higher education ...
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Line 21, column 69, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a possibility' or simply 'possibilities'?
Suggestion: a possibility; possibilities
...ibilty and in addition to that there is a possibilities of students going for higher education ...
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Line 26, column 130, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in getting jobs than Omega University. Even though this might be true. On the contrary, I ...
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Line 27, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...niversity might have increased in recent years. One cannot deny that this stateme...
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Line 28, column 56, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ot deny that this statement is weighty. If the number of students are more then th...
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Line 28, column 91, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
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...hty. If the number of students are more then there will obviously be higher success ...
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...te in obtaining jobs. On the other hand , the type of jobs offered to students gr...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...due to fall in Job rate in their city. Hence one can also say that job opportunities...
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...ed and also answering the questions like , What were the bases on which Potential...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in summary, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 55.5748502994 160% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3128.0 2260.96107784 138% => OK
No of words: 605.0 441.139720559 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17024793388 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95951083803 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73001811762 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456198347107 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 963.9 705.55239521 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 19.7664670659 162% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 61.9168340271 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.75 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.90625 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 23.0 5.15768463074 446% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248921836012 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065979539362 0.0743258471296 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747483397478 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885535101106 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0727667108243 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 98.500998004 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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