Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author argues that the Omega University should terminate the student evaluation of professors. This is based on the premises that after the implementation of this evaluation, the students' grades have risen by 30 percent and potential employes believe that this increase is inflated and mistrust the actual skills of graduates and thus these students having trouble to get a job in contary with the graduates from the nearby Alpha Univesrity. However, on deeper analysis, it becomes apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration, leading to a number of mistaken assumptions and logical flaws.
One such flaw is the argument that the increasement in students' grades is considered as inflated. It is possible that after the implementation of the evalutaion of professors, the students' perfomance have been risen due to the more efficient preperation of academic personnel and more rigorous proficiency during their courses as the result of their desire to have a satisfactory evaluation, maybe useful for their academic career. Thus the augment in students' grades is not a result of granted grades but the depiction of harder preparation of the professors. In order to overcome this flaw the author should cite specific reports from students who would describe suspicious approaches from professors or overly friendly behaviour in order to have a better evaluation from the students.
Moreover, the auhor is wrongly based on the argument that the graduates from Alpha University have better chances at getting jobs. Though, it is possible that Alpha University is a dominent university in the counrty with a lenghty sucessfull route through decades and it has more prestige. In such a case, it is sure that the Alpha University has cultivated interactions with working enviroment which are more efficient independently the grades of Omega University graduates. To overcome this flaw, the author should mention the annual report of the evaluation of the Univesrities. If Omega University possessed claearly a bettet ranking from Alpha University, then his claim would make sense and would more pesruasive.
The author also incorrectly make the assumption that after the termination of the evaluation, the graduated of Omega University would have better chances to get a satisfactory job.
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are several logical flaws. The recommendations in the essay show how the arguments may be strengthened and made more logically sound.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 2104 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.313 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.926 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.235 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.356 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.356 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 432, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...maybe useful for their academic career. Thus the augment in students grades is not a...
^^^^
Line 2, column 437, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... useful for their academic career. Thus the augment in students grades is not a result of g...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40404040404 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99985545344 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484848484848 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.0089749459 57.8364921388 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.666666667 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53333333333 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226935564154 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761077171379 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550349901633 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114529819994 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073308180842 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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