"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplier of high-quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author concludes that people will buy fabric overcoats with higher price after five years of production those overcoats again. Thus, the company will make a good profit by selling those coats especially because their major competitor does not make those coats anymore. The argument seems logical at first glance. But it needs evidences to prove different parts of it.
First of all, the author does not mention if the new wool fabric to make alpaca overcoat have the same quality compare to five years ago or not. It is obvious that if the quality is not the same people are not going to buy those overcoats. Moreover, we do not know if people are still interested to even buy alpaca overcoats after five years. Customers might have got to use other clothes other than alpaca overcoats. Or people might think that alpaca overcoats are not new fashion clothes anymore because there were no fabric coats in stores in last five years.
In addition, the author concludes that people will buy alpaca overcoat with higher price after five years again. The author has no prove of it. Customers might not be interested to pay more for those overcoats especially if they have already found their favorite clothes style in the past five years with lower price than fabric coats. Customers might buy them if they know that overcoats have the same quality like before, but even with same quality material people might still refuse to pay more for coats.
Also, the author claims that with selling fabric clothes, the company is going to make a high profit. But, he/she does not give any information about the cost of buying those wool fabrics. If the cost price is high, even if people buy them with higher price, still the company profits will not increase that much.
Last but not least, the author does not say that why their major competitor does not produce those coats anymore. Maybe because those wool fabric are expensive to buy. Thus, the competitor cannot make money from selling those overcoats. Or maybe because new supplier does not provide those wool fabrics with same high quality as before. Thus, the competitor does not want to produce alpaca overcoats with low quality materials to ruin the company reputation.
The author needs to answer different questions to prove his/her recommendation. The author should know the quality of new wool fabric, interest of people to buy those coats, and also the cost price and selling price.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 418 350
No. of Characters: 1978 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.522 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.732 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.114 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.174 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.995 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.696 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 129, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this wool' or 'those wools'?
Suggestion: this wool; those wools
...duce those coats anymore. Maybe because those wool fabric are expensive to buy. Thus, the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, still, thus, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90384615385 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17102843373 2.78398813304 78% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.391826923077 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0333037161 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6956521739 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0869565217 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4347826087 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204877828718 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649208586112 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564252928577 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113072798243 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515132926565 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.35 8.32208582834 76% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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