"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
In this argument the author claims that the company must start reselling the alpaca coats whose production was held by the company from five years due to supplier issue. The author also claims that it will turn into a profitable product right away and customers will be willing to pay high for such a product. I disagree with the argument as it lacks no strong reasoning. Also the author is not providing the basis of such assumptions in any way.
First of all the author assumes that the alpaca coat will sell very well among the customers. This certainly can not be interpreted by any means as there is no strong remark provided to prove such an argument. Moreover, most of the companies' competitors are not selling the alpaca coat. Such a scenario strongly directs the company to first analyse the reason that why these companies halted the production. These studies will beforehand provide the actual reasons and will direct the company in the right direction that whether such a production is profitable now or not.
The author also assumes the fact that there will be a pent up demand for the alpaca coat without any proof. There is no reference to any sort of survey or study by any means done to buttress such an assumption. Company must rely on plausible surveys which must strictly indicate the demand for alpaca coats in the region of sale to ensure profit. Blindly assuming such an interpretation is not relevant at all.
Author also claims that the customer will pay higher for the alpaca coats considering the fact that prices of most of the clothing products have increased. As we have already analysed that there is no sufficient proof that even the demand of alpaca coats may not exist, assuming high payoff from customers in being irrelevantly far fetched dream. Moreover, the price of the coats must be fixed according to market standards and the prices at which the competitors of the company are offering the same product. Tagging the coats with very high prices can be an economical blunder for the company.
The above discussion strongly suggests that the authors argument of selling alpaca coats may not be a very profitable idea after all for the company. Author also has not provided any proofs and no relevant sources are indicated my any means to support the assumptions.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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flaws:
need more arguments.
Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. //maybe this supplier is not reliable either.
condition 2:
This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. //your argument 1 and argument 2
conclusion:
Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase. //maybe the cost, salary, management..etc are higher nowadays.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1878 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.742 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.427 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.277 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...gument as it lacks no strong reasoning. Also the author is not providing the basis o...
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Line 9, column 49, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...e discussion strongly suggests that the authors argument of selling alpaca coats may no...
^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...any means to support the assumptions.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, moreover, so, well, after all, sort of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 396.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84343434343 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48319522894 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459595959596 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6343392436 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.947368421 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8421052632 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119907848103 0.218282227539 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0429165480602 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361500915323 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0723491969892 0.128457276422 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357480437508 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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