The following appeared in an article in the Grandview Beacon For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony Last year however private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the

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The following appeared in an article in the Grandview Beacon.

"For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Given such developments, some city commissioners argue that the symphony can now be fully self-supporting, and they recommend that funding for the symphony be eliminated from next year's budget."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The author suggests that funding for the symphony can be eliminated from the next years's budget because there was a significant increase in donations and attendance last year. However, there are several questions that need to be answered to substantiate the author's claim.

First, it is mentioned in the article that private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent last year. We need to know what is the reason of the huge increase. People will increase their donations due to several reasons and not every reason is likely lead to a consistent contribution. For example, there was a wealthy man died last year. Therefore, his children decided to donate a large proportion of his money to the symphony since he loved classical music. In this scenario, it is not reasonable for the author to assume that the private contribution would stay at the same level for the following years.

Second, the symphony has announced to have a higher ticket prices for the next year. The question that need to be answered is whether the people will be less interested in attend concerts if the ticket prices increase. Since people would only have a certain quota of money to spend on entertainments, they might decide to watch movies or dramas if they don't want to afford the higher ticket prices for concerts. Thus, the author should do some survey to make sure how many people would still like to go to the concerts even with higher prices.

Also, the commissioners argue that the symphony can now be fully self-supporting. However, what is the current percentage of the spending relying on private contribution and profits of selling tickets? The symphony might still need a lot of money from the government funding to pay their employees. For example, the symphony might have 70 percent of their spending relying on funding while the other 30 percent relying on donations and profits of concerts. After the unprecedented increase in private contribution and attendance, the symphony would only need funding that corresponds for 40 percent of the money it needs to pay. Although the funding needed decreases, it is not even close to self-supporting.

The author claims that the symphony can support itself. Therefore, the funding could be eliminated. Nevertheless, he needs to answer above questions to justify his argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07532467532 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81487746912 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472727272727 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.3764042503 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0476190476 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276895544974 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905293033444 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953210097903 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153820177067 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760087027701 0.0628817314937 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1904 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.933 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.72 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.377 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5