"For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony. Last year, however, private contributions to the symphony increased by 200 percent and attendance at the symphony's concerts-in-the-park series doubled. The symphony has also announced an increase in ticket prices for next year. Given such developments, some city commissioners argue that the symphony can now be fully self-supporting, and they recommend that funding for the symphony be eliminated from next year's budget."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In a statement given by some city commissioners , it is argued that the symphony has become self-supporting and mentioned that the budget that used to be allocated every year for symphony can be eliminated from coming year's budget.The commissioners have come to this conclusion based on the evidence that symphony has been contributed by private sponsors and flow of people in concert has increased almost twice in a rate. However,before this recommendation can be properly evaluated , two questions must be answered.
First of all, are the private contributor going to sponsor next year with proportionate amount of funding? In other words, can the private contribution alonewith no city funding will be enough to run the symphony properly?It is possible that those private contributions were promoting their product last year,and maybe they might not be interested to do promotion infront of same mass of people next year- pherhaps the grandiosity of symphony with proper management, possible due to city funding might have resulted private contributor to increase their sponsors as who would not want to promote themselves in a well running forum.Further, there is possibility that the timing of symphony concert and its theme and play artist might not parallel the interest of private contributor resulting decrease in the sponsorship. If either condition of these scenarios has merit, then conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, will the announcement of increase in ticket price attract the concert targeted attendees next year? The commissioners of the city prematurely assumes that the increase in price of ticket will definitely results in increase flow of attendees. However, this might not be the case. It is possible that the attendee will be discouraged to attend the concert due to increase in ticket price compared to last year-perhaps the high number of attendees last year might be the result of low price of ticket for the concert. It is likely to happen that the concert might not be able to bring out the artist, who might be worth paying for. In an ideal condition, the symphony organizing committe might call the most preffered artist, but if reality is such that they cannot be sure the most preffered artist for he show and the case where the exact artist will agree for the concert. If either of these condition is true, then the argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on seversl unwarrented assumptions. If the commissiner of grandview city is able to answer the two question and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation to not allocate budget for funding the symphony's concerts.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 458 350
No. of Characters: 2303 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.626 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.028 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.837 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.562 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...atement given by some city commissioners , it is argued that the symphony has beco...
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Suggestion: The
... be eliminated from coming years budget.The commissioners have come to this conclus...
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Suggestion:
...rs have come to this conclusion based on the evidence that symphony has been cont...
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...ncreased almost twice in a rate. However,before this recommendation can be properly eva...
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Suggestion: ,
...recommendation can be properly evaluated , two questions must be answered. ...
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...ated , two questions must be answered. First of all, are the priv...
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... be enough to run the symphony properly?It is possible that those private contribu...
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...s were promoting their product last year,and maybe they might not be interested to d...
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Suggestion: Further
...mote themselves in a well running forum.Further, there is possibility that the timing o...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... argument is significantly weakened. Secondly, will the announcement of incre...
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'result'
Suggestion: result
...ease in price of ticket will definitely results in increase flow of attendees. However,...
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Line 5, column 828, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'shows'.
Suggestion: shows
...e sure the most preffered artist for he show and the case where the exact artist wil...
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...ater. In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed du...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 453.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19205298013 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97176342479 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492273730684 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 171.313249902 57.8364921388 296% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 168.0 119.503703932 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3571428571 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64285714286 5.70786347227 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311910047252 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927771295009 0.0743258471296 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915036965151 0.0701772020484 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198232714838 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352584847199 0.0628817314937 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 12.3882235529 165% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.9071856287 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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