The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist. "Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However my recant interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
The following memorandum is based on study of anthropology in Island of Tertia. Dr. Karp, an anthropologist concluded that Dr. Field's observation about child-rearing tradition in Tertia is not accurate. Dr. Karp is try to put a point that study of child-rearing in Tertia and other island will be accurately given by Dr. Karp and his team soon. This argument is flawed for numerous reasons and based on several unwarranted assumption.
First, Dr. Karp talked about Dr. Field's study about child-rearing that has been done twenty years ago by Dr. Field. It shows that children in Tertia is reared by entire village rather than their biological parents. But Dr. Karp argued Based on his recent interview about Tertian children. From his interview Dr. Karp mentioned that children in Tertia spend much more time with their biological parents. From that he concluded that Dr. Field's study is invalid. But it may be possible that there might be a tradition of rearing every child. Moreover, as per Dr. Karp's interview we cannot justify that children in tertia is talk more about their biological parent that is why they are not reared by entire village. Here, Dr. Karp should have mention the things like there is no adequate evidence given by Dr. Field or He should have said that study is based on only one person that is not sufficient to get accurate result.
Furthermore, here the tradition of rearing children by entire village in Tertia is older tradition because it is observed before twenty years ago. It might get changed after twenty years of observation. And now children in Tertia may rear by their own parents. So, these kind of possibilities Dr. Karp should have to mention instead of arguing against Dr. Field's research. In addition to, Dr. Karp concluded that observation-centered approach is invalid and interviewed-center approach is more accurate. But here we cannot specify that which approach is best for child-rearing study because information is given here is not enough.
Finally, to put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that however, interview-center approach may be the best approach for child-rearing study, Dr. Karp's conclusion about Dr. Field's observation is not sufficient and cogent to make any kind of conclusion.
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the arguments are not exactly right on the point. Let's check out a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 371 350
No. of Characters: 1847 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.389 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.978 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.883 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.893 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.387 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tire village. Here, Dr. Karp should have mention the things like there is no adeq...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not sufficient to get accurate result. Furthermore, here the tradition of reari...
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Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...rtia may rear by their own parents. So, these kind of possibilities Dr. Karp should have t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1890.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09433962264 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9315614686 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460916442049 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6234811338 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4736842105 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400951148885 0.218282227539 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14431435011 0.0743258471296 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0989172972365 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257844137475 0.128457276422 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932114164764 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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