The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entir
It might seem logical to agree with the argument in which Dr,Karp has mentioned in his article that the children in Tertia are owned by their biological parents and are not reared by the entire village which eventually leads to the conclusion whether observation centered approach is good or interview centered is good.However the argument can end up being weaker than it seems or valid enough based on the facts and evidences provided.
The first piece of evidence that we need to evaluate Dr.Karp's argument is that whether the conditions in the island of Tertia has changed in these 20 years because Dr.Field has conducted his study in the island 20 years back .Which is why it is possible that the conditions might have changed now.For example it might happen that the Westerners might have settled their bringing out changes in their culture than Dr.karp's argument would be weakened.
Another piece of evidence is that Dr.Karp along with his graduate students has interviewed children of the island including Tertia.If we were to learn that he never interviewed a single Tertian child than this significantly weakens the conclusion.For example, that children on Tertia are raised communally, whereas children on other islands nearby are raised by their biological parents.
In order to fully evaluate this article we would also need the evidences of both Dr.Field as well as karp's. For example we actually do not know whether Dr.Field had actually stayed with the Tertian people and had made observation or he was staying in a faraway place and made it.To discuss about Dr.Karp's facts whether for many days had he interviewed those children,what kind of questions did he asked them.Just the mere fact that the discuss about their biological parents often and not about other adults does not conclude that they are raised by their biological parents.Without knowing what the children has actually answered, it is hard to accept the conclusion of Dr.karp.
It is difficult to have a discussion when the evidences are not mentioned properly.Also the result of Dr.karp's study to the conclusion that interview based approach is better than observation approach based approach we need to check the study designs of both these approaches.Maybe Dr.Field's did not conducted the observational study design in an effective way.In order to make such grandiose claims, Dr. Karp really needs a lot of additional evidence.
Clearly, then, we need to have additional evidence in order to get a more complete understanding of the strengths and weaknesses of Dr. Karp’s article. We need to know about Tertia and the surrounding islands, whether or not they have changed over the past 20 years. We also need to know about study design (Dr. Karp’s and Dr. Field’s). And we really need a lot more information if we want to extend the results of a study about one island culture to all anthropological fieldwork.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 496 350
No. of Characters: 2375 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.719 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.788 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 55.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.044 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.455 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.775 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.323 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...h is good or interview centered is good.However the argument can end up being weaker th...
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...ing weaker than it seems or valid enough based on the facts and evidences provide...
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...children of the island including Tertia.If we were to learn that he never intervie...
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...is significantly weakens the conclusion.For example, that children on Tertia are ra...
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...hat kind of questions did he asked them.Just the mere fact that the discuss about th...
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...he evidences are not mentioned properly.Also the result of Dr.karps study to the con...
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...ased approach is better than observation approach based approach we need to check...
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...tional study design in an effective way.In order to make such grandiose claims, Dr...
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
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...out Tertia and the surrounding islands, whether or not they have changed over the past 20 year...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, may, really, so, then, well, whereas, for example, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2444.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 477.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12368972746 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84080623503 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450733752621 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 47.0 22.8473053892 206% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.631707233 57.8364921388 305% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 244.4 119.503703932 205% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 47.7 23.324526521 205% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.6 5.70786347227 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 5.25449101796 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253702631824 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110888963139 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526252307341 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139102464184 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185727344793 0.0628817314937 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.5 14.3799401198 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.23 48.3550499002 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.4 12.197005988 167% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.8 11.1389221557 187% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.9071856287 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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