The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author concludes that limiting number of rental mopeds per day per rental company reduces accident in Balmer island. The author comes to this conclusion based on the observation of Seaville island. However, to fully evaluate the credibility of the argument the author must provide answer to these three questions.
Firstly, are the accidents due to the increase in number of mopeds? It may be possible that the accidents might be due to the bad conditions of rental mopeds with no proper braking system, slippery tires and bad handling condition of moped. Also, the accidents might be due to a greater number of pedestrians with narrow walking road. So, there are people walking in the moped way that might have increased the number of accidents. Path for walking needed to be widened instead of limiting number of moped to reduce accidents. If any of these scenarios have merit then the conclusion of the argument is significantly weakened.
Also, does limiting number of rentals per day per moped rental company decrease the number of mopeds? An owner of a rental company might start another rental company and deliver same number of mopeds per day to its customers. He does have the required number of mopeds to start a new company so it will be a no big deal to him. The island also might not have a policy about the number of companies to be owned by an individual and also the number of companies to be accepted in the island. If this is true, then the argument does not hold water.
Finally, do Seaville and Balmer island have same other conditions that allows them to be compared persuasively? Seaville island might have improved its road condition both for pedestrians as well as moped riders that might have reduced the number of accidents whereas, the roads of Balmer island are narrow, slippery, and full of sands from nearby sea. Also, weather condition of Balmer island may be bad compared to Seaville. Balmer island may often have foggy and rainy weather that increased the number of accidents. If any of these conditions are correct then the claim made by the argument cannot be valid.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide the answer to these three questions (perhaps in a systematic study approach) then the viability of the recommendation can fully be evaluated.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 527, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng number of moped to reduce accidents. If any of these scenarios have merit then ...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...its road condition both for pedestrians as well as moped riders that might have reduced th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 520, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...that increased the number of accidents. If any of these conditions are correct the...
^^
Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ts reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide the answe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, well, whereas, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87530562347 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60894745964 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422982885086 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5124492979 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9523809524 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207145906297 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792287192569 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695377651793 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121689432888 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072527183094 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 527, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng number of moped to reduce accidents. If any of these scenarios have merit then ...
^^
Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...its road condition both for pedestrians as well as moped riders that might have reduced th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 520, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...that increased the number of accidents. If any of these conditions are correct the...
^^
Line 5, column 117, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ts reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide the answe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, then, well, whereas, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 409.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87530562347 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60894745964 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422982885086 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 635.4 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5124492979 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9523809524 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4761904762 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207145906297 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792287192569 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695377651793 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121689432888 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072527183094 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.