The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this letter, the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette avers that the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island’s mopend rental companies in order to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. He supplements his argument on the assumption that the reduced number of rented mopeds will result in the decrease of the number of the accidents, that the number of accidents are peaked during the summer season, and that the inherent characteristics between Seaville Island and Balmer Island with regard to moped transportation are exactly the same. The argument seems convincing at first; however, the unanswered questions lead readers to conclude that the argument is flawed on many grounds.
To begin with, the editor should first answer the question whether the reduced number of rented mopeds necessarily entails the reduced number of the accidents. This is because the reduced number of “rented mopeds” cannot be equated to the number of all the mopeds in the city; although former can be regulated though the legislation proposed in the letter, the latter cannot be easily diminished simply by restricting the number of rented mopeds. For example, it is plausible that the restricting the number of rented mopeds can backfire the increase of private mopeds, offsetting the reduced number of rented mopeds. Therefore, the editor should provide more information regarding the amount of rented mopeds and private mopeds.
Furthermore, more answers are needed on whether the accidents are peaked during the summer season. Although it is unspoken, the editor implies that the number of the accidents is more significant during the summer season, as he avers to limit the number of rented mopeds during the summer season. However, he should also consider that in all likelihood, the short-term increase of the population during the summer season mostly consist of peoples who are not familiar with the moped transportation. Therefore, it is likely that the number of the moped transportation, and concomittantly the number of the accidents, remains constant regardless of the season. To strengthen his argument, the editor should elaborate more on the season-dependence of the accidents.
Finally, the editor should supplement his argument with more concrete answer on whether the inherent conditions between Balmer Island and Seaville Island are the same. As evinced in the letter, he adamantly argues that 50 percent of the annual reduction should take place, which is the very same amount of the reduction in Seaville Island after the implementation of the policy. On the contrary to the editor’s ungrounded belief, however, it is entirely possible that the different inherent conditions between the two islands lead the different result with the same policy. For example, it is plausible that moped transportation in Seaville Island relies only on rented mopeds, while in Balmer Island the transportation also relies on private mopeds as well. Thus, the editor should give more information on the inherent characteristics of the two islands.
In brief, the editor’s argument is not persuasive on many grounds. In order to bolster the argument, the editor could provide more information on the ratio of rented mopeds to private mopeds, the season-dependence of the accidents, and the similarity of inherent characteristics between the two islands.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 538 350
No. of Characters: 2817 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.816 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.236 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.816 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 266 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 99 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.689 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.429 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.632 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.241 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...e number of accidents are peaked during the summer season, and that the inherent characteristics ...
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Line 2, column 47, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...in with, the editor should first answer the question whether the reduced number of rented mopeds nec...
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Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...whether the accidents are peaked during the summer season. Although it is unspoken, the editor im...
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Line 3, column 203, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...he accidents is more significant during the summer season, as he avers to limit the number of ren...
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Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...imit the number of rented mopeds during the summer season. However, he should also consider that ...
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Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...-term increase of the population during the summer season mostly consist of peoples who are not f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in brief, on the contrary, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 55.5748502994 151% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2888.0 2260.96107784 128% => OK
No of words: 538.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36802973978 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91289264254 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.347583643123 0.468620217663 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 901.8 705.55239521 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.5026654066 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.0 119.503703932 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3157894737 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84210526316 5.70786347227 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334850110414 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119485666055 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1026663284 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198263885229 0.128457276422 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113749112919 0.0628817314937 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.3799401198 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 12.3882235529 214% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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