The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of this letter concludes that to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, Balmer island city council should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. To support this conclusion the author cites the fact that last year, seaville town council enforced similar measures, they attained 50 percent annual decrease in moped accidents. For several reasons the author provide scant reason to limit mopeds.
To begin with, Author assumes that all other conditions will be same that might affect the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. However, restriction of rental mopeds might force people to purchase mopeds instead. Also number of pedestrians might increase in the future; with more pedestrians the accidents could increase instead of decrease. Without considering and ruling out these factors the author should not say that decreasing rental mopeds will decrease number of accidents in Balmer island.
Next, the author does not consider the reason of last year seaville town decline in accidents. There might be a fair climate in which mopeds accidents are less likely to happen. The Roads of seaville town might be broader which decreases the chances of accident in seaville town. Fewer tourist might have visited seaville town last year which decreases the possibility of accidents. There might be enforcement of new strict traffic rules in seaville town which may have decreased the number of accidents. In any event,a decline in seaville town accidents for one year is not sufficient to state that decreasing rental mopeds will decrease the number of accidents in Balmer island.
Additionally, in asserting that the same phenomenon that caused 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville will cause 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents in Balmer island is very limited conclusion. Perhaps Balmer's ability to enforce the restriction is not as strict ac seaville's ability to enforce the restriction. If this is the case, then Balmer island might not achieve 50 percent decrease in accidents. Or population of seaville is always greater than Balmer. In this case also Balmer may not achieve the desired percentage . decrease in accidents. Since the author has not provided these possibilities, the editorial's conclusion cannot be taken seriously.
Finally, Decrease in mopeds can increase the pedestrians which might decrease the accidents between mopeds but increase the mopeds pedestrian accidents.
In conclusion, the author's conclusion is not well supported. To convince me that the proposed would achieve the desired outcome, the author has to ensure that no changes that might affect moped-pedestrian accidents will occur in future. And he has to rule out the possibilities stated above which can affect moped-pedestrian accidents. moreover, the author should give information of the rate of accidents in seaville prior to and after the restriction on rental mopeds.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...es from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. To support this conclusion the author ...
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Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...orce people to purchase mopeds instead. Also number of pedestrians might increase in...
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Line 5, column 518, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...ed the number of accidents. In any event,a decline in seaville town accidents for ...
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Line 7, column 622, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r may not achieve the desired percentage . decrease in accidents. Since the author...
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Line 7, column 625, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Decrease
...ay not achieve the desired percentage . decrease in accidents. Since the author has not ...
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Line 11, column 233, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...t moped-pedestrian accidents will occur in future. And he has to rule out the possibiliti...
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Line 11, column 343, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
... can affect moped-pedestrian accidents. moreover, the author should give information of ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'then', 'well', 'as to', 'in conclusion', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.288602941176 0.25644967241 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.145220588235 0.15541462614 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0827205882353 0.0836205057962 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0441176470588 0.0520304965353 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00551470588235 0.0272364105082 20% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.123161764706 0.125424944231 98% => OK
Participles: 0.0294117647059 0.0416121511921 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87200801859 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0257352941176 0.026700313972 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00183823529412 0.001811407834 101% => OK
Determiners: 0.0900735294118 0.113004496875 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0459558823529 0.0255425247493 180% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0183823529412 0.0127820249294 144% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3117.0 2731.13054187 114% => OK
No of words: 483.0 446.07635468 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.45341614907 6.12365571057 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.455486542443 0.378187486979 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.316770186335 0.287650121315 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.219461697723 0.208842608468 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149068322981 0.135150697306 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87200801859 2.79052419416 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 207.018472906 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432712215321 0.469332199767 92% => OK
Word variations: 48.6177434142 52.1807786196 93% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 19.32 23.2022227129 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8159309883 57.7814097925 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.68 141.986410481 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.32 23.2022227129 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.52 0.724660767414 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 3.58251231527 195% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 50.9970186335 51.9672348444 98% => OK
Elegance: 2.2641509434 1.8405768891 123% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.553928580964 0.441005458295 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130055365059 0.135418324435 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0902934757187 0.0829849096947 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.573370356053 0.58762219726 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.1664954051 0.147661913831 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.228130286807 0.193483328276 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10191667116 0.0970749176394 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.380293228125 0.42659136922 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0745103814756 0.0774707102158 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.390609599207 0.312017818177 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073839267133 0.0698173142475 106% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.87684729064 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 13.0 5.36822660099 242% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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